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Shadows of Past
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
~ Shadows of past ~ He stood there tall and proud She saw not a shadow lurking about... Upon carpet red he expressed a vow Forever and a day his love she will have... Life's responsiblities start to overwhelm With turn of a switch like a coward he ran... Streams of tears trickle unto her innocent heart Trying to understand so she may move on... Those delicate strings of love that once were spun Slowly release the ties of which same were bound... Embracing tomorrows among the blossoms of future's path Rememberances of a love now the shadows of past...  [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-07-2000).] |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
Very lovely and tender . And well written romantic words. I personally prefer the grapich (it is also lovely) at the head of the poem.... however it is just an opinion. LOL and not much to do with your wonderfully talented write which stands alone! Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Girl...this is sad yet uplifting....beautiful write |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
KSK, my thanks for your kind compliments and I kinda feel the image is best placed at the end of the poem due to the last two verses it sort of blends it all together... But then again that's my way of thinking  PAULA, I was so hoping you would catch this rite away cus let me tell ya your poem inspired me to touch upon some feelings and I thank you for that and also for being here to take a peak  [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-07-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey CB that's part of the world's problem..people running from their responsibilities...and like you mention here like cowards...I like the way you put this point across and the hurt that ensues with the responsible person.....take care ethome |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Coco...what a beauty you have here. "Shadows of Past" is a perfect title for this. And the picture did fit in, exactly where you put it---reading was very much like eavesdropping on the lady's deep thoughts. Applause and admiration from me to you. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dani~ This is stunning. I enjoyed the path your thoughts took, leading me right to that lovely graphic. You have quite the soft, nostalgic heart. You had to know I would like this one. Thank you so much for sharing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful written....love it and the graphic too.... well done. Charisma ~Theresia~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Those delicate strings of love that once were spun Slowly release the ties of which same were bound... Embracing tomorrows among the blossoms of future's path Rememberances of a love now the shadows of past... ================= bittersweet, tender render CoCo ... written as if taken from a diary page or a memories dream... well done ... those ties that bind are so very fragile love the picture...perfect jm I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
This brought a bitter sweet smile to my face and tears to my eyes.. Very well done and the graphic goes perfect with it, I think.  |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
Some days, I wish that the sun of memory wouldn't shine. Beautiful Coco. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
The whispers of rememberance sometimes tickle not the ear ... Well Done Coco ... well done! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautifully done, Coco! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well my friend, look who is shining in the sunny part of the poetic path. Tis you my dear and you do it so well. This was not only beautifully penned but so well thought out and shows those moments of reflections entirely as they truely are. Loved this one and the graphic goes with it perfectly. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoy the read!!!!!!  |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Enchanting..my kind of poem..LOVE the painting... ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is fabulous, Coco! Very beautifully done! Denise |
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