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Startime
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0 posted 2000-12-07 12:47 PM


My World
Karen Torbiak
2000

Understanding
brings shearing, white,
hot pain burning
into your very soul

The earth screams out
her anguish
and you open your eyes
to see the blood red
tears of broken hearts

Bullets tearing through
the young firm flesh
of men as they
sacrifice their lives
and never know why

An innocent baby’s scream
as it is torn from it’s mother
in a land where life
has become worthless

Starving young bodies
looking at us
from a tv screen
while we quickly
change the channel
of our guilty conscience

Belief in love
of any kind becomes
a perversion developed
that we may loose
our souls
to selfish pleasure

All this and more
my eyes do see
in reality
then I weave my vision
of fantasy where love
is still precious
to be desired above all
and to leave a little
love for all to share
in MY WORLD



Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


© Copyright 2000 Karen Torbiak - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

1 posted 2000-12-07 06:36 AM


Karen, I understand this feeling.

'An innocent baby’s scream
as it is torn from it’s mother
in a land where life
has become worthless'

there seem to be many many lands where life is like this...

sigh

Good write!

K

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2000-12-07 06:41 AM


Karen there is so much wisdom in the reality of your words in this piece...I really appreciate your thoughts on fantasy they are well delivered and the meaning stands out!!
Hopefully one of these fantasies will come true. Love the way you're mind is working in this one I hope lots of people will read because it's worth it!!

Charisma
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3 posted 2000-12-07 07:38 AM


I think that everyone create their own "my world".....to escape from the real world, by times.
thank your for sharing this wonderful penned poem.

Charisma

Nan
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since 1999-05-20
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4 posted 2000-12-07 07:42 AM


Karen... I've been looking for a post from you... and I'm not disappointed.  This is a wonderfully crafted work with an important message for all to heed.  Nicely done indeed..
Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
5 posted 2000-12-07 08:38 AM


Such words of wisdom created by you deserve a standing ovation.. I hope a "wonderful read" and a "fabulous job" do well since I can't seem to get my hands to clap on screen.    Very, very nicely done.
Passions Voice
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since 2000-10-23
Posts 291
Michigan
6 posted 2000-12-07 12:29 PM


Excellent Startime.  I share your wishes for this kind of a world, and I hope that it does come true.

passion is life. . . ~Diana


Startime
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
Canada
7 posted 2000-12-07 08:56 PM


Thank you so much everyone. I know I weave so much fantasy but with all the pain and hurt in the world I think we need a little fantasy in our lives. I am so glad you liked the message of this poem. Much love to all of you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


Balladeer
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8 posted 2000-12-07 09:48 PM


Karen, this is great....yes, there is much suffering in the world and it is good to occasionally escape into our small fantasy worlds if for nothing more than a moment's peace......
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