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if you think... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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if you think my dreams are only of you of us... hand in hand heart to heart strolling life's sandy beaches... if you think you're always on my mind in my heart... touching me holding me safe in warm lover's embrace... if you think i can only be happy with you... validating loving completing my very soul... if you think... then think again my dear for in reality... you are merely a fragment of my imagination ~vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Whew! is there a rebuttal here....powerful writing!! very creative! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well darn it anyway. ONLY a fragment of your imagination huh? And to think all this time I thought I was special. Oh well!!!!!  Very nice write my friend, even if I did get put in my place.  A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
What a declaration of independence you have written here! Good for you, Vicky!  To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very powerful words!! loved it. |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
"fragment"... did you mean figment? and if you really mean't "fragment" that means she's just a "part" of your imagination.... what are you "really" trying to communicate? (just curious) (in a friendly..) cus I really loved everything up the the last line then i said.. (huh?) Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
VL, the strength in this write is awesome while the whispering touch of endearment is subtle (ME LIKES ME LIKES ME LIKES) I compliment you sweet lady for ANOTHER great write coco |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
sometimes its the love we imagine and find in the fantasy that is the one that we fall for... very cool poem Vicky.... I really like the way you presented this ... it was like falling along with the words... well written reflections creative and unique take care jm I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow! What a surprise ending. I was so certain it was going to be, 'Well, you're right!' Powerful piece! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ How totally cool ! I just loved the unique ending - 'you are merely a fragment of my imagination' Not a made up part - but a small, detached and broken part ... that is just such an original thought. Love the way your mind works ! ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
 I really like this and the way you wrote it out...  Very original!. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Vicky~ I like this one, it makes me think of the song called "Your So Vain". (I think thats the name of it.) Deb |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
ethome- lol @ rebuttal... glad you found it 'powerful'.. thanks so much! Mark- well...it's about time somebody put you in your place...lol. and that place would be a very special one...right here in my heart, my friend.. hugs to you.. Marilyn- you betcha!! LOL thanks much, my friend.. hugs to you.. Rosebud- thanks so much... glad you enjoyed.. redwriter- yes...i meant to use 'fragment'... it all had to do with the effect i was looking for... btw...i'm a she...so she's a he...lol. thanks for taking time to read and respond.. Coco- wow...you flatter me.. thanks so much for the enthusiastic response...i really appreciate it.. really happy you like it.. Janet Marie- thanks for the kind words, my friend.. glad you enjoyed.. VAS- COOL!!! that's what you were supposed to think..lol. glad it worked.. thanks so much.. Marge- YES!! i KNEW you would understand what this one was trying to say.. THANK YOU!!! great big smiles on my face now.. really glad you enjoyed it.. love and hugs to you.. BWA- thanks so much for the kind words.. so happy you enjoyed it.. Deb- YES...i used to love that song when i was a kid..lol. still do... glad you enjoyed it.. thanks all, ~vicky < !signature--> "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 12-07-2000).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
And I think I liked this much. |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Liked this much-much... Especially the ending... ~LL~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
vandana- thanks so much... really glad you like it.. Lady Lightning- thank you...glad you enjoyed.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
dittp the masses..the ending just caught me unaware and gave me such a surprise... a declaration of girl power...you go, gal!!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I think you got the gusto...and that's a good thing!! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
well...better to be a fragment than a figment...*sigh*...........LOL this is a good one tricks..and i like the ending lots.. but...are you SURE..you dont think only of me???? rofl!! (boy! that could start a bad rumor!!hahaha!!) hugs, g "people who need people are the luckiest people..." barbra s. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Vicky* I think this just became my favorite from your pen...I loved the ending but the whole thing flowed together perfectly!! The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Vicky, very honest and powerful write.... I like to see poetry that flexis muscle... Parker |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
kaile- yeah...girl power...that's it...lol thanks for reading...glad you like.. Martie- thanks so much for the reply.. really glad you enjoyed! dg- LOL...yes...i much prefer 'fragments'. thanks pal...glad you like this one.. Shhhhh...you weren't supposed to tell anyone that i think only of you...that was supposed to be our little secret..lol. yes...that's the makings of a potentially very bad rumor...lol... big hugs to you... Holly- thanks so much, my friend.. so happy you enjoyed.. Parker- yep...flexing my muscles i am... wanna feel 'em? glad you enjoyed.. hugs, ~vicky < !signature--> "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 12-08-2000).] |
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