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Cuddlez
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since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362

0 posted 2000-12-06 12:43 PM


I've been fighting with myself
Fighting with my dreams
Fighting with my memories
Falling apart at the seams

Cracking up inside
And trying to hide
All thats wrong with me

So please forgive me I crack up
Forgive me if I let go
And pounds my fists into the wall
Cry so much I fall

Into my own little world
Where theres just one boy- one girl
A place where I can heal my soul
Arms I can rest in that will not let me go

Two shoulders I can lean on
And someone to push off of
Baby, just remember
While all this stuff is happening

When I'm tearing up and falling down
Its you I love and you I trust
To be my shelter in the dark
Just remember babe I love you
More than you will ever know


Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

© Copyright 2000 Cuddlez - All Rights Reserved
CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

1 posted 2000-12-06 01:01 AM



CUDDLEZ, this is one powerful write you've penned here...

A pocket full of emotions swaying a reader from many a direction and your end verse speaks of a softened heart's sighing plea...

hugs2u
coco



[This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-06-2000).]

Wesley the Blue
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 426
Forest Lake, MN, USA
2 posted 2000-12-06 02:16 PM


this is an excelent poem, filled with sentiment.  I loved reading it.

KM

Even in the darkest night, someone will be there holding a candle for you.


snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
3 posted 2000-12-06 07:03 PM


'When I'm tearing up and falling down
Its you I love and you I trust
To be my shelter in the dark
Just remember babe I love you
More than you will ever know'

Hey, Cuddlez!  Good to see ya again!  Great write!!  Love it!!  

sp


'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

Startime
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
Canada
4 posted 2000-12-06 07:33 PM


This was a very moving poem. I loved the love and trust you put in it so beautifully. Thank you so much. Much love to you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


Cuddlez
Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362
5 posted 2000-12-07 08:20 PM


Coco: Thanks for your reply!
(Yah my heart has been softened lately;0)
KM: Glad you liked it...
SP: Back with a vengeance! Will be responding to a million poems soon... Finals week here;-).
Startime: Great to meet you....

Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

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