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Lone Wolf
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0 posted 2000-12-04 09:44 PM



Once upon a time
My pure heart was held by thine
Nothing was more fine

Our love at its prime
Even the sun would outshine
The pleasure was mine

Mountains that we climb
Take us closer to cloud nine
Above the tall pines

This completes my rhyme
Concluding with one last sign
Through the night I shine

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Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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insect
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1 posted 2000-12-04 10:01 PM


These are beautiful together
Magnificent!

Startime
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2 posted 2000-12-04 10:35 PM


These are lovely. I am surprised how beautifully they say so much. Thank you. Much love to you from me.
Poeminister
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3 posted 2000-12-04 10:42 PM


LoneWolf,
Lovely haiku.  Nicely done..

Poeminister

"...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls-
O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
-Poe

wayoutwalt
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4 posted 2000-12-04 10:51 PM


connect the haikus doo doo doo heheh cool
Sven
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5 posted 2000-12-05 12:42 PM


There should be a word for doing this with haiku. . .

Wonderful LW. . . really wonderful. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Lone Wolf
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6 posted 2000-12-05 11:01 PM


insect . . . Thank you!  They just seemed to flow together.  

Startime . . . A lot can be said in very few words my friend.  You are welcome.  

Poeminister . . . Thanks.

Walt . . . Always fun to connect them.  You just don't know where they'll go!!

Sven . . . If there is, I don't know it.  Thank you for reading.  Glad you liked them.




Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

tracie66
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7 posted 2000-12-06 04:11 AM


Hey there my friend, you have indeed done a fabulous job with these haikus...well done  
~HUG~
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Charisma
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8 posted 2000-12-06 08:50 AM


yes......love these wonderful senryus
wonderful penned my friend.

((hugs))
Charisma

Lone Wolf
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9 posted 2000-12-06 10:24 PM


Tracie . . . Thanks my friend.  They just what came out . . . a shot at something different.  

Charisma . . . Thanks my friend.  Glad you liked them.     (((HUG)))


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

vlraynes
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10 posted 2000-12-06 10:33 PM



Lone Wolf-
   each of these is beautiful on its own...
   and together...a masterpiece...
   very lovely write..

   hugs,
   ~vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Victoria
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11 posted 2000-12-06 11:47 PM


great job ..flowed nicely..

                 ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Passions Voice
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12 posted 2000-12-07 12:35 PM


Really great Lone Wolf.  And to make them all rhyme, truly an accomplishment.  


passion is life. . . ~Diana


Lone Wolf
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13 posted 2000-12-07 10:31 PM


Vicky . . . Thank you.  They seemed to belong together, but I didn't write them that way.  

Victoria . . . Thanks!  

Passions Voice . . . The rhyme just happened, I wasn;t really trying, but have been writing a lot of rhyme lately.  I like them though.  Thanks.


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Irish Rose
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14 posted 2000-12-08 09:34 AM


Jennifer, this is neat, I've never attempted Haiku, don't know how!  Maybe sometime I will......loved it.

What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman



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