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XTC_AngeL
Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 17
Australia

0 posted 2000-12-04 04:41 PM


This is my first attempt at writing a poem not about love or friendship so please forgive me if it's not that good!

Soothing, deep waters,
A never ending sight,
Brilliant shades of blue,
Darkened by the night.

And at the start of this,
Yellow grains of sand,
Line this stretch of water,
The beauty of our land.

A picturesque view,
That we rarely see,
A romantic place to stay,
Just for you and me.

Endless, different wildlife,
Just beyond our reach,
This magical place on earth,
Can only be the beach.

© Copyright 2000 Nat - All Rights Reserved
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-12-04 04:45 PM


I certainly see nothing wrong with this. I see it as a very loving sweet poem and I enjoyed it very much and    welcome to Passions...you'll enjoy your stay....ethome
Victoria
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Member Ascendant
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869

2 posted 2000-12-04 04:47 PM


Welcome to Passions..nicely done..loved it

                 ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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