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Coloring My Scores
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Coloring My Scores |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Coloring My Scores To spill passive wine, a slant of flesh against the grain of its soothing. Pouring its renewal from my skin -- I believe would mark me a poor steward of its teaching. Quiet, but for the blanket coloring my scores -- breath once wasted in a bantling's displeasure has found its service in the wonder of a gem. Though my feet may be found in the scurry of a press -- its movemet fails to rival my inflections. My soul -- a map of glass, where her light issues the course for my voice to travel. © Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
this must be one of those poems full of symbolism...I don't understand it at all it sounds good to the ear, the rhythm is good, the flow is fine, but after two reads, I don't know what it's telling me I'm sure it's just me. If I had someone to discuss it with, it would likely become clearer |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Hi Vas, Perhaps I should have kept this one closer to home, more than likely those who are more aware of me would recognize the message. I do appreciate you reading and responding, Thanks! Robert Joseph |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
So, then, I get no explanation? That's okay. Maybe telling it exactly is not something you want to do on the internet. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
To Vas, and any others interested... Basically, this piece deals with abiding by a passive nature, and not wasting words in reacation to others negativity, and how it relates to the love of my life. I hope that enlightens you...thanks again for reading. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It is sometimes impossible to "explain" poetry for how does one explain the soul. Each person may read something differently, I read a journey of sweet wine into a life. I enjoyed this very much. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
RJ...your beautiful poem and your following explanation did make me think a bit. Symbolism as a language of the subconscious is indeed a personal affair, and I battle between using the more obscure symbols or that of a more universal nature, which is sometimes considered "trite" or cliche'...and THAT said, may I add that I did love this, and it's interpretation can be taken in several directions...especially your summation lines here: "My soul--a map of glass, where her light issues the course for my voice to travel..." There's tranquility in that...I love it. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
you made me think either, and I agree with Irish Rose, each person will read it differently, the poem will coloured by the reading person him or herself. loved reading it. Charisma |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Kathleen, Serenity, and Charisma...Thanks for responding. I often like to stretch my mind by my heart's inspiration, finding fresh and lively ways of expression -- the only way I know to grow and become more creative in my communications. I realize by doing this at times one runs the risk of the reader's interpretation being clouded. I appreciate your comments, I enjoyed writing this piece, and I'm pleased with its outcome. Robert Joseph |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
My soul -- a map of glass, where her light issues the course for my voice to travel. there is no misunderstanding this line. eloquently spoken is your gesture of love Robert. Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Thank you, Annie...I appreciate your kind response. Robert Joseph |
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