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JamesBowie
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big old Bangor Maine up by the shack

0 posted 2000-12-03 11:54 PM


Bare tree branches whisper in the wind
as the cold air grasps at my mouth
drawing out wisps of heated breath
that passes up into the sky and seems
to form a halo around a midwinter moon

the cold starts to tingle at my feet
as I walk across the frosty ground
where grass crunches in uneven lumps
startling a deer standing ghostlike
only feet from my unobservant path

The sky is winter clear
the milky way seen in broad bands
a clarity you don't have in the city
where all I see is headlights and smell
the leftovers of dirty people

The breeze shiftily changes direction
as the air takes on the smell of snow
intimating the coming of another winter gale
and I can't tell you if my eyes water
from the cold or the beauty before me

A real man

kisses his children goodnight

© Copyright 2000 James Bowie - All Rights Reserved
KokoStewartKoomoa
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since 2000-12-04
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Waikiki, Hawaii
1 posted 2000-12-04 01:46 AM


Exquisite imagery ... such a delight to read and ponder. I enjoyed immensely!

Passion,imagination and intellect running together.
         Poetry in motion~~~
                                                   Aloha with warmest regards,
~~<~~{@
       ~*Koko Stewart Koomoa
              @}~~>~~

[This message has been edited by KokoStewartKoomoa (edited 12-04-2000).]

JamesBowie
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since 2000-11-25
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big old Bangor Maine up by the shack
2 posted 2000-12-06 12:30 PM


thank you koko- I have been trying to return to my old style of nature writing- I mean I do live in Maine after all
Wesley the Blue
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since 1999-09-02
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Forest Lake, MN, USA
3 posted 2000-12-06 02:20 PM


ah, winter.  it may sound strange, but I love winter.  this is a wonderful poem, and living in northern Minnesota, I can definetely relate to it.

Even in the darkest night, someone will be there holding a candle for you.


liquidphantasy
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 15
california
4 posted 2000-12-06 03:15 PM


"a clarity you don't have in the city
where all I see is headlights and smell
the leftovers of dirty people"

Great description of the city.

and

"and I can't tell you if my eyes water
from the cold or the beauty before me"

excellent ending! Enjoyed this. Thank you for posting. Sometimes we just take beauty for granted.

dragonpoe
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since 2000-11-12
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Palm Bay, Florida
5 posted 2000-12-06 03:18 PM


Lovely. Strong imagery, brought me back to nights when I would go walking when it was cold and frosty.  I love Winter.
Love your last lines  

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

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lost in blue pages
6 posted 2000-12-06 04:10 PM


cold wrapped me when I read this one....love the imagery.....and your wonderful penned poem.

Charisma

Nan
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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
7 posted 2000-12-06 09:02 PM


Nicely done... and I totally expect you to keep that snow up there in Maine.. That's the deal.. I keep the beach... You keep the snow..
Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2000-12-08 10:58 AM


James~
this was quite lovely. a really beautiful
read...but now i know who sent us this
white stuff to North Carolina lol    
just kidding. excellent write, and very
lovely images!
take care.
~amy~

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

9 posted 2000-12-09 02:30 PM


As beautiful as this is, your quote is what I shall remember.

What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman



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