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Remember What I Say
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Remember What I Say |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Remember What I Say I cannot take the scent from you or wash the stains away, but when the day becomes the night, remember what I say. Around the time a whisper creeps and answers to your call, secrets there in darkness still seeping down the halls, around the time a shadow plays and antagonizes sane, shyness breathes and tickles sins and distances remain. So twist the cloth in folds of two and smile even though, and dance the way the devil does and watch the gardens grow. Upon the walls the flowers sprout and frighten off the rage, and in the air the petals fall to set the center stage. So now's the time to let them go, release the tainted spell, circle 'round the fruited fields and imagine all is well. I cannot take the scent from you or wash the stains away, but when the day becomes the night, remember what I say. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Spitfire--what wonderful images you leave me with...soemtimes light can take away darkness, yes, and a shadow remains. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Interesting..and only in a good way... 'Upon the walls the flowers sprout and frighten off the rage, and in the air the petals fall to set the center stage.' This image in particular really appeals to me... a fine write Spitfire...  KThe wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is a different style from you, and I enjoyed this muchly...the meter was right on time and the imagery dark but beautiful. You do continue to impress me, spitfire...an excellent write and a delicious read!!! |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Hi Fire Excellent reading! Your words always give me a warm feeling when I'm feeling cold. Thanks friend |
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