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Can't Describe (Inspired by Janet Marie's "Mere Words...')
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Can't Describe (Inspired by Janet Marie's "Mere Words...') |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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The way I sometimes cry Tears cannot describe For we still seek real holding And I fear that I may die The way I sometimes feel Lonely neither can describe It's an ache and longing For you and it's so real So I write my poetry And neither can it do Justice to the feelings felt When I think of you It doesn't nearly tell the world My addictive need to pen My thoughts of you on paper As I sit here in my den For you are my only comfort All the ease my heart can find All that keeps me in my sleep Or when my waking moments bind Inspiration's often lacking When I want to write of you When my muse abandons me And I sit idly blue I want to tell of my desire for you To put my fire in words To let all its intensity Fly out like flocks of birds To tell you that I love you Can't express my fullest thought Love is just not word enough To tell the love you've wrought So I'm stuck sometimes with paltry rhymes At times when my words fail When images of butterflies Or waterfalls won't sail All I can give this moment All God's given me to write That you're my lovely Gueniviere And I'm your Lochinvar this night There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Mar |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...but I do believe... you just did... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
The perfect companion to Janet's poem. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill..The first stanza of this poem made me want to cry too... Your feelins are not paultry, nor are your rhymes...This poem is a painting of love felt and expressed beautifully. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wil, my word! There's a plague of passionate, powerful, poetry going around this site and this is no exception. Write on Kethry Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Wilfred This is so beautiful!! I love the word choice you used in this...and I do believe you have just expressed how you felt and quite wonderfully i might add. truly enjoyed reading this! take care. ~amy~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sir Poet Bill* You ARE poetry my friend...this is so whimsical and beautiful...never do you cease to amaze and delight me with your weaves~ The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Written with true feeling Bill..and from the depths of your kind heart..as always ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Wilfred, this poem is filled with so much love of heart it brought tears to my eyes... Having read the eloquence of your words on screen I gotta tell ya PoetFriend you scored a home run on your poetic expression here... As always Wilfred, the pleasure is mine  coco |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To tell you that I love you Can't express my fullest thought Love is just not word enough To tell the love you've wrought So I'm stuck sometimes with paltry rhymes At times when my words fail When images of butterflies Or waterfalls won't sail All I can give this moment All God's given me to write That you're my lovely Gueniviere And I'm your Lochinvar this night ================ well you KNOW Im loving this right.. Its so cool to see "my" poetry thru another poets eyes...this is beautiful Bill, written with all the love and desperation of Romeo and Juliet ... wonderful emoitve romantic bittersweet piece thank you for allowing my words to inspire you and for sharing it. later-Lochinvar-gator  jm I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
To all of you for your lovely responses - and especially JM for giving me (a 2nd time) a poem of hers - to feed on and inspire me. I know my love has found it plasing - and that makes it triply appreciated. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I canna see for the tears in my eyes...beautiful |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Paula- there's nothing to cry about - thank you ~S~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sir, you continue to amaze. . . and I continue to learn. . . thank you. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I know you'll always have your muse just close your eyes and she'll be there your pen and heart are joined so the words will always flow. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Wilfred, You've painted a heartfelt image here, very nicely done. I am in awe of your talent, consider yourself hugged. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Counting Blessings... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sven- Nothing special - I just get lucky - Thank you so much inot2B- I really love your replies - they do wonders for my self esteem - Thank you Gemini- I can't get enough hugs - I'll take them constantly - Thank you so muchKarilea - Thanks twice again - for the BTTT (I'd overlooked unresponded replies) and You caring - that means so very much Thank you, thank you, thank you |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Treasure Chest .... |
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