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Master
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since 1999-08-18
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Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-12-03 04:21 PM


New York,-- barren city, devoid of color.
The gusting winds holler
At the pedestrians crossing the zebra.
Mercury laps the zero.
The passage of time cares not for infants,
But here, even nymphets
Lack vital signs. And only cold statues
Appear to capture
The chill that stitches these side streets.
Each morning the eye greets
The hung-over clouds, like drying clothes.
And each night, the moths
Anxiously soar to the lightened candle.
The clock strikes the temple
With throbs that can keep you awake
At your wake.

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[This message has been edited by Master (edited 12-04-2000).]

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Tony Abbot
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1 posted 2000-12-03 05:33 PM


Great piece here,inventive use of imagery,painted a picture.Thanks.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

Master
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2 posted 2000-12-03 08:00 PM


Thank you for replying...
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-12-03 08:14 PM


~Your clever wording set a mood and plopped me right in it. Very cool write. Enjoyed this. Take care now. *Peace.
Master
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4 posted 2000-12-03 09:45 PM


SpitFire, thanks for replying... I'm glad you liked it. *Peace*
Master
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5 posted 2000-12-04 12:38 PM


I've revised the beginning a bit, it should make more sense this way.. Enjoy
Kevin
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6 posted 2000-12-04 05:23 AM


hey bro,

long time but your still kicking  

always loved your work
wish you would find the inspiration for happier times   but your bleak discriptions capture me every piece... write on

Master
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7 posted 2000-12-04 11:11 AM


Hey Kev,

Thanks for your comments! I love your work also. Keep writing!

Master
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8 posted 2000-12-04 06:33 PM


Does anyone have any critique or suggestions on this one?
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