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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-12-01 09:23 AM




The Golden Skein of Word

he pondered
          words swelled
                   thoughts rambled
                              passions welled
he penned
          expressions flew
                   demeanor changed
                              obsessions grew

she quietly mused
           found words on wind
                   read then what he wrote
                              her secret touched within
she penned
          expressions flew
                    demeanor changed
                              obsessions grew

quiet grew he in her read
           heart pounded pleasantly
                     penned he word with hidden grace
                               wistfully thought of her face

she glowed in smile
           inner secrets trembled
                      wound her pen around a reflection
                                he read with deep introspection

he deigned to draw
           the skein of pure raw
                       affection from her heart
                                 complexion he'd impart

she softly struggled to catch her breath
            as feelings from her he softly wrest
                       from the golden skein of word he drew
                                   from her the shy quickly flew

electric in their obsessive zeal
            the golden skeins of word grew real
                      and life again poured forth from within
                                   having touched inner secrets therein

they penned
          expressions flew
                   demeanor changed
                              obsessions grew




Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2000-12-01 09:37 AM


Sunshine,
Just got sun burned from the bright of your poem. My fault, forgot to put on lotion. *L*

Startime
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2 posted 2000-12-01 09:41 AM


Oh what a wonderful way to start my day. Your beautiful words. This poem is so very touching and loving. I love it. Much love to you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-12-01 10:29 AM


she quietly mused
           found words on wind
                   read then what he wrote
                              her secret touched within
she penned
          expressions flew
                    demeanor changed
                              obsessions grew

quiet grew he in her read
           heart pounded pleasantly
                     penned he word with hidden grace
                               wistfully thought of her face
======================
HOW COOL IS THIS....way cool....
excellent Sun...
both your very intense verse and presentation
obsession grew...yes...exactly.
jm

Sprayed across my heart and hers
Danced butterflies in the wild
This angel, this woman ,
who loves me with the innocence of a child.
~DeVante~

ethome
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4 posted 2000-12-01 11:46 AM


Hey there you with the stars in your eyes.. yes sir this is a romantic little gem if I ever read one ....ah I've got to get out my own skein of words and say to you that with words like this and a name like Sunshine you could melt the cold thoughts of despair like the sun melts April snow...yes siree!  
"she softly struggled to catch her breath,
as feelings from her he softly wrest
from the golden skein of word he drew
from her the shy quickly flew."

Just great!! loved it muchly!!

Nate Dogg
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5 posted 2000-12-01 12:01 PM


This is just beautiful Sunshine....and I loved the way you wrote it too....I might have to borrow your formation cause I truly loved it! (Smiles)

Nathan

Butterflies_dont_cry
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6 posted 2000-12-01 12:08 PM


Ahhhh the power and the magic of the Golden
Skein...you penned it like I've never seen
it done before Karilea...this is fabulous!  
Into my library with this one most
definately!


The best and most beautiful things
in the world cannot be seen or even touched
---- they must be felt with the heart~
*??*

Sven
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7 posted 2000-12-01 12:28 PM


Ah yes. . . to wind one's self in the skein of the heart. . .

Wonderful my friend. . .  

-----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Marsha
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8 posted 2000-12-01 12:42 PM


Kari, this is magnificent, it truly is. This is beautiful, and still you get better and better. I adore this one love I truly do. Utterly wonderful.
Take care
                 Majestic Marsha
                        
                            


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Sunshine
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9 posted 2000-12-01 02:12 PM


Sy...you make me smile {~,^}..., thank you...

Startime, it pleases me that you liked this...thank you...

JM...how COOL you are for picking out your fav lines....you're too cute...thank you...

ethome...somehow, sometimes, stars and sunshine go together...that's a wow comment, thank you!...

Nate...welcome home...been awhile...and of course you may...thank you...

BDC, I shall humbly reside in your library...with pleasure...thank you!...

Sven, this is slowing wending it's way to yet another idea....thank you...

Marsha, if I am better, it is because I might draw on the talents that surround me here in the blue walls of prolific pens...don't you think? Yes, of course, you agree!...thank you, English dove...



Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




LngJhnAg
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10 posted 2000-12-01 02:17 PM


Karilea - Obsessions???  Really?  woo hoo

c'mere, ya lil tease... what?!  You weren't thinking of me???  *woebegone eyes*

hmmmpphhh - I'm still gonna fantasize

Balladeer
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11 posted 2000-12-01 07:18 PM


KArilea, this is a poem to touch a heart softly...

Everything involving this poem is absolutely wonderful! Thank you for all you share.....

Sunshine
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12 posted 2000-12-01 09:05 PM


To first read LongJohn, then Balladeer...my heart wonders...which is more sincere...?

Thank you both, Gentle Men...pensive mood lately...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Tiersdin
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13 posted 2000-12-01 09:09 PM



Sunshine, the entire poem was just...Pretty!
the words and formatt alike...

*smiles*
-Tier

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14 posted 2000-12-01 09:17 PM


You wonder which is more sincere? Between LongJohn and I? I am wounded....
Sunshine
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15 posted 2000-12-01 09:36 PM


Tier, formats are wonderful things to mold and make one's own...thank you for reading...

and 'Deer? Now the question has answered itself, has it not? {~,^} Those who leave kind words come back again, and again...those who are fickle, do not...Thank you...{you may wipe the frown away now...}


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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