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Illusions of A Silver Spoon
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Illusions of A Silver Spoon |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Honeysuckle, serpent tongue, a cry of agonies' "too young" and all the sparkle all foretold death of eyes sale of soul glitter fading bitter, old-- (oh make me think and tell me lies...) make me sign the compromise on the dotted... dotted......line... I love you. That, I won't deny. inhale...bewail... the silver spoon... Life...illusion... lost too soon. and if i could? I'd live anew... baptized in the morning dew... I cannot breathe enough of you--- Afraid to wake without you there. and oh dear god, oh my despair... I wake, I ache, and all's the same. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well described illusions for sure Serenity I like the skillful use of all the metaphors ...well written!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yanno? story of my life tho...the minute I decide I LIKE being called Celeste? whaddya do? SERENITY. Wish that I were, rofl....*wink* Lucky for you? I'm EASY. love ya much, FRENCHIE!!!! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"inhale...bewail... the silver spoon... Life...illusion... lost too soon." You've penned such a wonderful flow in this thought-provoking piece Serenity ... I really enjoyed this!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
too young" and all the sparkle all foretold death of eyes sale of soul glitter fading bitter, old-- (oh make me think and tell me lies...) make me sign the compromise on the dotted... dotted......line... I love you. That, I won't deny. inhale...bewail... the silver spoon... Life...illusion... lost too soon. and if i could? I'd live anew... baptized in the morning dew... I cannot breathe enough of you--- Afraid to wake without you there. and oh dear god, oh my despair... I wake, I ache, and all's the same. ====================== god sen....you just bleed down this thread baby ... *sigh*(complacent) ...is it enough to know ...that I know .. that you know... yaddayadda I dunno me twin...Id love to offer advice.. but me looks in the mirror of my life and shakes me head..ya know?..yes ..you know heres one tip tho...dont put those silver spoons in the dishwasher...they turn green   ..yayayayayaloves ya me does ... when all else fails ..listen to chick tunes ~Let It Rain~ Amanda Marshall Kristen Hall I have given, I have given And got none Still I'm driven by something I can't explain It's not a cross, it is a choice I cannot help but hear his voice I only wish that I could listen without shame Let it rain Let it rain on me Let it rain, oh let it rain Let it rain on me I have been a witness to the perfect crime I wipe the grin off of my face to hide the blame It isn't worth the tears you cry to have a perfect alibi Now I'm beaten at the hands of my own game It isn't easy to be kind With all these demons in my mind I only hope one day I'll be free I do my best not to complain My face is dirty from the strain I only hope one day I'll come clean Come take my hand We can walk to the light And without fear We can see through the darkest night Let it rain Let it rain on me Let it rain, oh let it rain Let it rain on me Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Enjoyed the read, Demons and Dragons I'm familiar with. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
You put such beauty into your words. This is wonderful and heartfelt reading. Much love to you from me Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity serene thy name from heart's ache doth blame not life but takes fact and transforms it to belief and goes on well done, little one... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Well done! enjoyed the fast rhythm of this. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I thank you all so much for reading. Your kind words and caring support do keep me going some days....and for that? I simply cannot express my gratitude. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
In a fantasy one time I dreamed you asked me for poetic advice....in reality, I am the one asking you. You blow me away with how you do what you do...!!1 |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity- oh yes...i REALLY like this one... 'inhale...bewail... the silver spoon... Life...illusion... lost too soon.' awesome write, my friend.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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JamesBowie Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 252big old Bangor Maine up by the shack |
this is cool. I just plain like how it was written, almost a list but not quite- very interesting |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Michael...the depth of your kindness never ceases to astonish me...your reply is truly stunning for me...I thank you, as I blush and curtsy...oh my! vicky?...many hugs back atcya!!! I thank you! JB...thanks for noticing...the "list thing", I mean...I wanted to write this one "rapid fire" to convey the intensity behind the desire of addiction, not to mention the short attention span that is the result. (smile) Much thanks and gratitude to you all. |
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