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Moments Alone
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Moments Alone I've listened, storing away each syllable for quiet moments. I've coupled my heart to each wish -- taking steps like a late arrival to the matinee, as not to turn your eyes from the screen. The moments you need alone to watch your own life -- finding yourself in the drama. I offer prayers, and pull you close in my meditations -- reminding myself of a course you told me you would take. Your wings, the world once thought as broken -- they stretch in the calm air created by your solitude. I chase the tear to a place of surrender, my vision now clear, my pulse quickened. Soon you will return, revived, renewed -- landing in the want of me. We fold away as night blankets the arbor teeming with life -- a seamless blossom in warm air undisturbed. Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RJ~ Oh my god, this is GORGEOUS ! I knew there was a reason I couldn't sleep - I think I must have felt this one coming ! 'I chase the tear to a place of surrender, my vision now clear, my pulse quickened. Soon you will return, revived, renewed -- landing in the want of me. We fold away as night blankets the arbor teeming with life -- a seamless blossom in warm air undisturbed.' Just doesn't get much better than that, my friend. So enjoyable. Thanking you - I am. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Beki applauds most enthusiastically!!!! Robert, this has the most exquisite imagery...so very fresh! "I've coupled my heart to each wish -- taking steps like a late arrival to the matinee, as not to turn your eyes from the screen." "I offer prayers, and pull you close in my meditations -- " "Soon you will return, revived, renewed -- landing in the want of me. We fold away as night blankets the arbor teeming with life -- a seamless blossom in warm air undisturbed." This poem is one of teh best I have read all week...looking for more of your work now  |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Robert, This is very beautiful, well done. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I offer prayers, and pull you close in my meditations -- reminding myself of a course you told me you would take. Your wings, the world once thought as broken -- they stretch in the calm air created by your solitude. I chase the tear to a place of surrender, my vision now clear, my pulse quickened. Soon you will return, revived, renewed -- landing in the want of me. We fold away as night blankets the arbor teeming with life -- a seamless blossom in warm air undisturbed. ====================== outstanding writing exceptional in its expression and imagery that last verse is exquisite ... "landing in the want to me" ... what an amazing line that is when one really thinks about its essence... wonderful poetry Robert take care jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Bravo. There is no other reply I can muster, this is amazing verse. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Marge, Beki, Daniel, Janet, and Kathleen... Thank you, your generous replies are greatly appreciated. Robert Joseph |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
very impressive Robert - coherent thoughts, great imagery, well put together thank you philip |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Wonderful imagery. I love the visions of lonely angels, they appear so breathtaking. As does your poem. like it much "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Philip, Saxoness...Thanks so much, I appreciate your thoughtful responses. Robert Joseph |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I've listened, storing away each syllable for quiet moments. I've coupled my heart to each wish -- taking steps like a late arrival to the matinee, as not to turn your eyes from the screen. The moments you need alone to watch your own life -- finding yourself in the drama.' Excellently beautiful writing, Robert! Love it!! sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Robert Joseph, this is breathtaking! The love, concern and gentle support show through every line. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Robert Joseph--this was excellent poetry in both content and form...and the beauty of this understanding love that lets go--such a beautiful picture of giving...very much enjoyed! |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
SnowPants, Tara, and Martie...Thanks for responding so generously, I'm pleased to know you enjoyed this piece. Robert Joseph |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
We fold away as night blankets the arbor very soft romantic images Robert..enjoyed ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I chase the tear to a place of surrender, my vision now clear, my pulse quickened. Soon you will return, revived, renewed -- landing in the want of me. We fold away as night blankets the arbor teeming with life -- a seamless blossom in warm air undisturbed. very very beautiful..can take one's breath away or rather steal it ~Wynter * you were my 500th post ..what a beauty to be resting on  < !signature--> "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 12-02-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is exquisite...to feel this depth of love...to have the ability to let it grow in its own way and time...just beautiful |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
RJ, I now spend this moment alone Dazzled!! I love it! and this ..... I chase the tear to a place of surrender, my vision now clear, my pulse quickened. Soon you will return, revived, renewed -- landing in the want of me. We fold away as night blankets the arbor teeming with life -- a seamless blossom in warm air undisturbed. Wonderful! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very, very nice writing...James |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Serene, evocative writing - with some very original syntax... this line: 'We fold away as night blankets the arbor gives me shivers.. wonderful to read you again Robert... it's always a pleasure! K |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Victoria, Wynter, Paula, Maree, James,and Severn...Thank you all very much, I'm pleased to know you each enjoyed this piece. My pleasure to share with you, Robert Joseph |
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