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Beki
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0 posted 2000-12-01 12:21 PM



03)

in brisk blue air
one unfallen apple
clings to a black branch.

04)

Figures of light
etched in filigrees of ice -
snow on my window.

© Copyright 2000 Rebecca Reese - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 2000-12-01 03:59 AM


Very nicely done Beki...great images!!
Charisma
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2 posted 2000-12-01 07:39 AM


great imagery....love them very much.

Charisma

Beki
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3 posted 2000-12-01 07:21 PM


thanks ethome and charisma  
Sunshine
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4 posted 2000-12-01 09:00 PM


vivid color, nice imagery...

Karilea
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Tiersdin
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5 posted 2000-12-01 09:05 PM



Enjoyed reading both of these... You have such a wonderful way of expressing yourself in Haiku! Very good!

-Tier

Beki
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6 posted 2000-12-02 04:42 PM


Thank you so much Sunshine and Tier...
Poeminister
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7 posted 2000-12-02 05:13 PM


Lovely haiku, enjoyed them both...

Poeminister


Poeminister
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8 posted 2000-12-02 05:51 PM


Just a question: What's the least amount of syllables you can have in a haiku?

[This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 12-02-2000).]

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9 posted 2000-12-03 11:02 AM


i knew you would deliver...and dont thank me for ereading your work, it has been sheer pleasure to be able to
VAS
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10 posted 2000-12-03 11:24 AM


Vivid...loved remembering the filligree on the icy windows...thanks for the memories!
Dennis L. White
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11 posted 2000-12-03 11:31 AM


Beki,
  Delightful vignettes of winter, so aptly done!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)


Beki
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12 posted 2000-12-04 06:21 PM


Poeminister, I don't believe there is a minimum, I have seen them published with as few as 7-8 words...they may never be OVER 17 syllables tho...12-17 seems to be the norm, with those who don't hold with the 17 syllabla standard.

Kaile, Beki smiles  

VAS, thanks a bunch.

Dennis, I loved your haiku, I have written many poems about just such a moon. Thank you for sharing yours  

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