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Another Day in the Life of a Flower Delivery Girl
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Another Day in the Life of a Flower Delivery Girl |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Another Day in the Life of a Flower Delivery Girl Today I dressed in feelings covered my hair in a net of hope and let it fall over my shoulders I walked out into the morning with shoes like dirt so sturdy yet giving because I felt like I was moving through time and it was not wasting tapping my shoulder with directions Shoulder pads of compassion saw me down the corridor of age where wheelchairs directed the day and death was fragrant in the looks that watched me for recognition and when my smile touched the air it sprinkled across those faces like candy sprinkles on cake At a house on the street of weeping I knocked and waited with impatience dotting my I but when the door opened to tears my red dress melted across the porch and my arms ached with their sleeve of understanding even the flowers that I pressed across the threshold folded as pain fell into their light I would have stayed with the comfort that I felt tight around my chest but I knew that she could see stranger hanging around my neck and her grief needed a friend Besides I still needed my wheels of fortune to take me over the hill to somewhere else but around the curve to last stop the whole thing fell over and the water of life leaked onto the floorboard and followed me with a trail to a tall and stately building bedraggled and not even apologetic I asked for a drink to keep me going back to where I had been So all things considered and a telephone call I guess I could call it a day and to find the doorbell with no sound was the way it was more often then not but the clincher was the going around and about and up and down to a bell that I could not ring not in my ordinary clothes not without flowers in my hand and my heart on my sleeve. |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Sounds like a tough life...very well described Martie. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, Martie, I just read your poem to Fran and I only stopped three times because my voice was too choked to continue. By the time I was finished we were both crying....and I still have tears in my eyes. need I say any more concerning my feelings for this poem? |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
'and waited with impatience dotting my I' Wow! Another masterpiece of sight, sound, and emotion from your pen! Denise |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Martie,...I know that I always say this, but your writing takes me places. It does, and I love that. I'll read this again. *Peace you. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, I do wish you'd raise the Kleenex flag when you post tear-jerkers like this...darn it all...just when I thought I was getting back on keel... I think I'm going to have to find an inexhaustible supply of my daddy's hankies... and dear? It was remarkable...this piece... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Elizabeth--I didn't mean to make it sound tough...it's not, challanging some times and wonderful and sad...yes. Balladeer--You are so special...thank you for letting me know you read it to Fran..it means alot to me. Denise--Hardly a masterpiece...just another day...thanks. Spit Fire--You can come along with me any time...bring your peace though. Karilea--Thanks so much for the remarkable...didn't mean for it to be so sad. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ It wouldn't be sad on an ordinary day - but this was not ordinary day - so we will shed a quiet tear and hope for your 'sleeve of understanding.' What a glimpse into the Life Of A Flower Delivery Girl you've given us. *Hugs* to you for this little FTD bouquet!  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
At a house on the street of weeping I knocked and waited with impatience dotting my I but when the door opened to tears my red dress melted across the porch and my arms ached with their sleeve of understanding even the flowers that I pressed across the threshold folded as pain fell into their light I would have stayed with the comfort that I felt tight around my chest but I knew that she could see stranger hanging around my neck and her grief needed a friend ================== but the clincher was the going around and about and up and down to a bell that I could not ring not in my ordinary clothes not without flowers in my hand and my heart on my sleeve. ================== you just need to be kissed for this one... and me thinks this should have a different title... A day in the Life of a Poet...who delivers flowers?? NAAA What a poet does in her spare time? NAAA One who writes like this...needs to quit her day job and write??.... YEPPERS  day and nite..write...24/7...write ... love this my dear...I do I do me Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
good grief martie i just did the math on the timing! allowing a bit of time to get a coffee, type it up and post it, plus a few minutes for interruptions, i make it a maximum of an hour and a half for this... if that's right then JM is right, you need to quit your day job .. no seriously ... i have more to say (as usual... ~grin~) P |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie this one squeezed the heart to the limit...what excellent writing!! I feel for the rest ...but the writing is excellent.. special poem I really enjoyed... JM might have a valid point you know??? maybe that's where you should be......take care...ethome |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I know you still have to fill the gasoline tank on your van... but that is just taking care of details. *S* This poem makes it obvious that compassion fuels your deliveries... this is stunning! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Though I walked through the valley of shadows with you I knew you would lead me out. *L* Sy |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--I don't often get a tip...now you have given me one...thanks..Hugs! Janet--once again I thank you for your enthusiasm and encouragement...maybe today I'll send some things out...yes, cause I already do write much of the time. Philip--You're about right...but I watch some of the evening news and started dinner..that left 1/2 hour...thanks for being so cute and for your encouragement! Ethome--JM always has a valid point...thank you so much for such a wonderful comment. Suthern--Thank you so much for your kind words...and for reminding me of the best kind of fuel. Sy--I'm glad I lead you out...thanks for the smile. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Martie, this is without doubt a unique and engaging look into the heart and soul of life...thanks for sharing it with us. Robert Joseph |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Robert Joseph--I'm so glad that you found this interesting and unique..thank you so much for such and nice reply! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I remember when our singing group - performed at senior citizen homes and homes for unwed mothers - how our audience reacted to songs from Rogers and Hammerstein etc. Their tear begat ours. - Your images conveyed your sensitive humanity in every phrase and had me crying all over again and again |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--I guess sometimes emotions is catching...it is difficult to take flowers to those places where all eyes are looking at you hoping that the flowers are for them...and they're not...makes one wish to never grow old and infirm...there are such lovely people there who take a smile and make it last all day...thank you for your sensitive and sweet reply. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bump - Cause some things are too beautiful to be over with so quickly ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Martie, I am overwhelmed at this poem I get a mix of many emotions which you brought out in me tonite but I end this treasure of a read in my reply with a smile... I must also convey merci to our friend Marge for bumping this up where it should reside... Beautifully done PoetFriend... coco |
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