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Teardrop (Ghazal)
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Teardrop (Ghazal) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Last night I cried and you brushed away the first teardrop. Your anger grew and then you did not care about the next teardrop. We talked awhile and I thought that I saw your first teardrop. You ended our love right then and there with only one teardrop. Now I know that my love is gone as I cry my last teardrop. On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. ~me~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh how very sad. It always brings tears to my eyes to hear of love ending. My heart hurts for your loss. Much love from me to you Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I remember the day that I wrote this Startime, it was a painful day. I thank the powers that be that the day is past. Thanks for reading. On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. ~me~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Gentle Spirit, Such pain and sorrow in this one my friend. I am glad to hear that day is past. I hope you never have to feel this way again. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am glad that you've come through this grief, for the strength now shows that you can share it... well done! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent use of the form GS. . . it's not one that you see a lot. . . And the words, wonderful. . .  ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lone Wolf, as I also am glad that day has passed. I hope no one ever has to feel this way!! Thanks. Sunshine, sometimes getting passed the pain ends up in written words. Thank you for reading mine. Ah Sven, it is good to see that you are familiar with the form. It is not the easiest challenge I have ever done, but the challenge came at a good time when I could make the words work in the form. Thanks....... On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. ~me~ |
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