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JamesBowie Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 252big old Bangor Maine up by the shack |
At times I see the parting waves laying flat across the desert crust deceiving layers to uncaring eyes promising water but delivering dust |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Broken promises can be like that... |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
short and intense..i liked the last line especially "promising water but delivering dust" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah I found a treasure to dust off and return to the top... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
James Bowie... I ALWAYS love reading your cryptic verse..  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JBowie~ This is superb imagery ! I can SEE it so vividly ! You are quite the creative craftsman. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
one short stanza saying so much..... "promising water but delivering dust"-- great line... loved it! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
It's amazing how so few words can capture so much! Outstanding imagery, very powerful and intense, I'm sure all can relate to the pain in your poem. I loved the last line. This is your best by far Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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