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snowpants
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0 posted 2000-11-29 08:47 PM


Tonight,
I'd like to sit with you
Under the clear night sky,
Full of glittering stars,
Each communicating,
In its own language,
The message of the heavens.
As we reminisce
On days of the past,
I'd ask you about everything
I've always been afraid to know.
Perhaps you can give me answers;
Tell me the truth in your heart.
How astonishing it would be
If you had all the explanations;
My heart would no longer wonder.
It would then be possible to sit
Under the cloudless, star-filled sky
And take in the wondrous beauty
Of a clear conscience.


'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

© Copyright 2000 snowpants - All Rights Reserved
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
1 posted 2000-11-29 08:52 PM


Hey! Great stuff, snowpants!  I want to sit there too..."Under the cloudless, star-filled sky, And take in the wondrous beauty, Of a clear conscience", but I'm afraid my conscience may be lacking somewhat.

jwesley

Lone Wolf
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2 posted 2000-11-29 09:02 PM


snowpants,

Wonderful writing.  If only we had all the answers, we would never have to wonder again.
How astonishing it would be
If you had all the explanations;
My heart would no longer wonder.

Very good.  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Victoria
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3 posted 2000-11-29 09:25 PM


nicely written snowpants.. enjoyed

          ~Victoria~

              


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Startime
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
Canada
4 posted 2000-11-29 09:28 PM


The whole vision of sitting under a star filled sky and pondering the eternal questions of man feels very romantic to me.*sigh* Thank you so much for the read.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
5 posted 2000-11-29 11:34 PM


Kris--

This is beautiful my friend! My favorite
of yours thus far! Loved the pure honesty
and heartfelt emotion you expressed in
this. I have enjoyed watching you grow
with each poem you write...and am so glad
you and I share a great friendship. Talk
to you later. Take care.

Amy ô¿ô
~~~~~~~~
LOL  

"The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences"



ParisGrl
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 610

6 posted 2000-11-30 12:30 PM


Kris,

I enjoyed this poem!  nicely expressed.

Take Care,
Laura

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
7 posted 2000-11-30 12:32 PM


SP* This is beautiful...so soft and
delicate...one for my library and one for my
heart.  Excellent weaving~


The best and most beautiful things
in the world cannot be seen or even touched
---- they must be felt with the heart~
*??*

snowpants
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KS
8 posted 2000-11-30 01:26 PM


jwesley:  thank you!  but, the stars are for all of us to enjoy (even those of us with less than clear consciences!)  

LW:  thanks!  yes, it would be nice to have the answers, wouldn't it?  glad you could stop by!  

Victoria:  thanks!  glad you enjoyed!!  

Startime:  yep.  the night sky has to be the most romantic scenario of all, I think.  Thanks!!  

Aim:  hey girl!  now I know you are trying to give me a big head!  really, thanks so much for stopping by.  you are too sweet!
-e  ~~~~~~~

Laura:  thanks!  it's nice to see you here!  glad you liked it!!  

butterflies:  well, thank you!  it is an honor to be in your library and your heart!  I'm glad you liked it!  

sp

'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

SEA
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with you
9 posted 2000-11-30 01:32 PM


SP~ loved this.......


"I'd ask you about everything
I've always been afraid to know.
Perhaps you can give me answers;
Tell me the truth in your heart."

fantastic!   -SEA

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
10 posted 2000-11-30 01:36 PM


Ah my friend, you have painted the perfect vision of love at it's best as it blossoms into the strength of finding the boundaries on which it rests.  This is truely amazing my friend and it is so heartwarming to see you writing so deeply from your heart.  Loved it much.
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
11 posted 2000-11-30 01:37 PM


Ah my friend, you have painted the perfect vision of love at it's best as it blossoms into the strength of finding the boundaries on which it rests.  This is truely amazing my friend and it is so heartwarming to see you writing so deeply from your heart.  Loved it much.
snowpants
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KS
12 posted 2000-11-30 06:02 PM


SEA:  thank you!  I am glad you liked it!!  

Mark:  well, thanks, my kind friend.  You are so thoughtful in your reply.  I'm glad you enjoyed it!!  

sp

'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

vandana
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13 posted 2000-11-30 06:16 PM


Loved it!!!!!!!!!
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