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Tony Abbot
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0 posted 2000-11-29 07:03 PM


Her sighs are like arrows, poison-tipped darts,
That pierce the heart, and thaw frozen veins,
Her tears like knives,they tear me apart,
I am bound to her,manacled and chained.

Her lies, jagged thorns ,they become my crown,
A diadem that draws blood with her frown,
Her sins and her sadness are part of me,
This is love's joy and perfect agony.
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'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot



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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-11-29 07:26 PM


this is such a COOL poem...
outstanding use of metaphor and comparison
and the emotions are written with depth and intensity.
I really like the dark edge that many of your poems have.

"This is love's joy and perfect agony."

how poetically perfect and true that line is
and how very cool as well.
another one of yours for my file.
thanks
take care
jm



Sprayed across my heart and hers
Danced butterflies in the wild
This angel, this woman ,
who loves me with the innocence of a child.
~DeVante~

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2 posted 2000-11-29 07:48 PM


Tony~ WOW!   I am so blown away by this, excellent write   -SEA
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3 posted 2000-11-29 07:53 PM


Tony, you captured the ying and yang of a relationship very well...

Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




soozieque_28
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4 posted 2000-11-29 08:08 PM


This is a great poem. It shows how love hurts, but we still have to have it. Love it.
        

Tony Abbot
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5 posted 2000-11-30 05:20 PM


Thank you all for replying.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

Startime
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6 posted 2000-11-30 05:25 PM


Yes, love can be painful at times but love means working with understanding and compassion to ease the pain and make it more joy than sorrow. This was beautiful and heartfelt. Much love from me to you.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


Tony Abbot
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7 posted 2000-11-30 05:36 PM


Thanks,Startime.This poem is about being strongly affected when a loved one goes through pain or goes against you.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

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