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Mothers Rain |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Mother breathes the space before the paper leaves her hand hitting upon the floor. She screams out an epitath to a god thats fallen asleep whispering her sin to him and hoping he'll keep. The tears fall down like the winters unrest collasping to her feet they sing in harmony. The tales of her life that brought about her son who flees in all ways she could only dream of. How he stands on his own while just across the way stands a woman whom he loves and wants to look away. Standing next to her a lover from the past who molded his anger and loved without cause. So she wonders about his heart, of the choices he makes looking in a frame of glass, she sees herself in him. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Wow! this is truly outstanding! a most powerful poem. I've read it over a couple of times and am still unsure of what you may have intended for the reader to grasp. But it brings to the mind and heart many things from my past. excellent! -Tier |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Michael, Very powerful and emotions here really shows. "The tears fall down like the winters unrest collasping to her feet they sing in harmony". Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Michael, this is exceptional writing. Very,very powerful. I know in writing this piece you most have felt a sense of anger and perhaps even a loss for words from her actions. If you are like her...she too must have a special heart hidden somewhere.  Hugs and love, Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
In the mirror of your heart, what do you see? That's the question here. I agree with Marina, she must have a heart like yours. Excellent writing. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is DEEP, m'friend. An intriguing read, that speaks differently to me each time...(yes, I keep reading it over, grin...) What a talent you have! I love the cyclic nature of this, the mirrors of ourselves in each other...fantastic!!! |
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