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Tears of the Glacial Queen
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Tears of the Glacial Queen |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Soul gripped with an icy glove frozen by the hand of her lost love Crystals make a dazzling scene She’s been crowned the Glacial Queen There’s not a flame to melt the bars nor healing for the buried scars She’ll not weep for lover’s past nor believe that love can last Once bronzed by Passion’s fire her soul did burn with desire Promised walks in eternity loved with such sweet purity She woke one day and he was gone cold and alone she met the dawn No trace of him left behind only love to haunt her mind One dark day his grave was found under the snowy earth he was crowned She lay and wept upon the stone till frozen and weary to the bone She walked away a frozen tomb where only shadows dare to loom Left upon his silent grave glistened the tears of love she gave A sunlit ray danced upon their form like a rare sparkling gem to adorn Within a winter breeze they froze and formed a single....perfect rose  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A sunlit ray danced upon their form like a rare sparkling gem to adorn Within a winter breeze they froze and formed a single....perfect rose ================== ahhhh my frigid butterfly LOL... ERR..that came out wrong  hehewhat a lovely weave my sweet SS.. this is an awesome tale... it has all the elements a moth loves to read  this is bittersweet, but beautiful imagery with the visions of the snow and ice. your fantasy pen has given us a work of beauty me sweet must be nice to have a muse  love this you too me Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Holly, I do believe you've transcended the cocoon stage of writing and have completely metamorphosized into the butterfly of beauty that you were always meant to be.... This...is a poem. And it belongs in everyone's library... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ Well, just squeeze my little heart this morning ! This is too pretty, too sad and just too-too precious ! Yeppers ... it just might remain frozen in my memory. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Oh my!!!!!!! stunning!!!!!! Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Very lovely. Enjoyed this poem much. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
~Butterflies~  WOW This is so sad and beautiful You have such a talent SEA~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
SS* Thank you sweetie for your read on this last night...you know how much I cherish your opinion~ Karilea* Your comments do not fall lightly into my heart...thank you very very much~ Marge* It's an honor to receive such compliments from you~ AWC* Thank you so much~ Poeminister* To know that even one person enjoyed this makes sharing poetry worthwhile~ Sea* Awe thank you...I rhyme "ok" but you'll never convince me of anything else but I thank you for reading~ |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Oh, my Butterfly, I wish I could weave my words to make pictures like this in my mind! I love it and can't wait to "see" more of your words. Love y'all, ME |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
This reminds me of a fairy tale, albeit a sad one. Beautiful from start to finish. -Tier |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Butterflies~ Hello, my dear, sweet friend! How wonderful to come back home to such a lovely welcome! This poem was woven with the beauty of the heavens themselves, my dear! Such a heartfelt tale -- I think I am going to cry! This is beautiful, my friend. You never cease to amaze me!!!!! Love YA~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Butterflies: All I can say is WOW!!!! This was unbelievably beautiful yet sad yet so perfect. What an amazing peice you have written here. Thanks so much for sharing! kat |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Butterflies, Just exhilirating and so captivating. You are the finest. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now look who is posting poetic perfection and taking us all into the depths of total awe with her writing. This my friend is just lovely and though it is one of sadness, when I look deep into it, I find the total strength of love all that it has to offer. Yes, the PERFECT ROSE for sure just as you are the perfect butterfly. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Holly, this is a beautifully woven, sad tale. extraordinary and exquisite. Much admiration from me, lady. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, My dear friend, this one is hauntingly beautiful. The end is absolutely perfect. You have grown in leaps and your writing reflects that. Loved this tale you told so well. Great work. **AW HUGS** LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
My Mom* Well we both know where I got the love of writing from so it won't be long and you'll be weaving again...love you and thank you~ Tier* I guess they can't all have happy endings can they...I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you so much for reading~ Terry* Thank you so much my friend...so good to see you back Happy Birthday to you!!Kat* From the bottom of my heart I thank you~ Daniel* You're much to kind...I appreciate your replies and thank you so much~ Mark* It's nice to see you back my friend. Thank you so much for you uplifting words of encouragement and praise...it's an honor~ S'en* Thank you so much my dear friend...I'm so glad you enjoyed this weave~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Holly- so sad, and yet so beautiful.. this touched my heart, as yours always do... i love it much. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Just beautiful Butterflies ... wonderful pictures you've woven into my mind this wintery eve ... beautiful visuals and flowing words you've penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Butterflies....THIS is poetry. You have done an excellent job with this one. You are becoming a Monarch! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Butterflies--What a perfect tragic love story...left me with a wow...beautifully done! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
LW* You snuck in on me last time...lol Thank you so much for your reply my friend...you know how much it means to me~ Vicky* It's always a pleasure to hear from you...you have my thanks~ 'Deer* You'll make me blush if you keep that up Thank you so much...it's an honor coming from you. And CONGRATS to you on 7000...Rara Avis eh??? sounds pretty important!Martie* To "wow" you is an honor! Thank you so much for reading |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
This is wonderful. To be the one that is warm of heart. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Stunning is the word for this...awesome poem. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Diana* Thank you very much~ Elizabeth* Thankful and honored is what I am |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Wow! This is an excellent piece!! So well written, a painted picture filled my head, making me regret that not a single drop of artistic juice runs through me, this needs a fantastic oil painting to adorn it. I absolutely love it! With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love this Butterflies that ending is so good .....made the whole poem into a memorial to the power of love....magical power that we all try to explain here but can't do it exactly, but have a great time trying.... great read!! ethome |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, butterflies....this piece is so beautiful and breathtaking...I mean from the first lline to the last line your exquisite use of words just grabbed ahold of me....this is what I would call a classis piece...you get a perfect ten from me! Nathan |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
From the opening stanza, through the last word, I read in expectancy of the next line...compelling work, very much enjoyed. Robert Joseph [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 12-01-2000).] |
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