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Dream Or Premonition |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada 
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Dream or Premonition Karen Torbiak 2000 It is a late summer evening with the fresh washed smell of new rain still hanging in the air The sun is warm as it soaks up the remaining drops left over from the recent sun shower He has finally finished his work for the day and what hasn’t been done can be picked up tomorrow For now he wants to relax in the quiet surroundings of his home, set near the forest without the disturbing presence of neighbors As he leans back in his hammock strung between two stately trees he surveys the peaceful beauty leading to the unmarked forest behind him Placing hands behind his head and letting his gaze follow the line of the trees he marvels at the blueness of the sky with just a few fluffy white clouds floating by He closes his eyes for a minute and breathes deeply of the sent of pine, earth and fresh rain Still, as part of him rejoices in the serene beauty of it all he feels the loneliness of no one to share this tranquil beauty with Eyes still closed his senses pick up a sound that increases with its persistence Opening his eyes and looking about for the direction of the sound that now has become annoying he spots a large black cat sitting close by watching and demanding his attention He calls out to it to no avail so he tries to return to his pleasant pastime although slightly curious about where this strange cat came from The cat would not be deterred from his mission as he continued his loud caterwauling to get the man’s attention Deciding the only way to be able to return to his rest the man arose and approached the cat asking what the problem was Once the man was on his feet the cat took off at a run towards the forest stopping at intervals to renew his racket The man had heard of dogs doing this kind of thing when wanting someone to follow them but the idea that a cat would be as intelligent was too amazing to accept Nevertheless he followed the cat into the forest never quite loosing sight of him as the cat led the way halting frequently with what appeared to be an impatient look on his face As they moved deeper still into the now darkening forest the man noticed that the path being traveled was no longer familiar Suddenly loosing sight of the cat as it went around a bend he increased his pace to come to an abrupt halt as he rounded the bend He became transfixed as all his senses became alert to the indescribable beauty before him Right before him was a large meadow covered with the thickest, greenest grass sprinkled through with a myriad of multicolored wildflowers all bathed in perfect evening sunlight Standing in the middle of this meadow with the black cat circling her legs stood a beautiful woman gazing at him with soft brown eyes Her hair was chestnut falling in gentle waves past her shoulders framing a face showing a small hesitant smile Her gown was the lightest green falling smoothly to her ankles as it clung lightly to her perfect figure, blending with the grass at her feet His heart began to beat faster as he gazed upon this lovely vision of nature and womanhood He closed his eyes taking a deep gulp of sweet air as he tried to calm his thundering heart And opened his eyes with a start hearing a persistent noise that drove him from his hammock to see a black cat calling to him Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
a lovely fantasy..I love this kind of story..very well done.. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Startime, This is fascinating! You had me hanging on every word dying to know what awaited the man around each corner. Very well written tale. Sometimes, the line between dreams and reality is very thin. Loved this one.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kudos to a fellow romantic...  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Pegasus 111 Thank you so much, I love to write fantasy as well as read it so I am very glad you enjoyed this poem/story. Thanks so much for your commentLone Wolf *giggling* I am very glad it capture you. Seeing the vision was just wonderful. I have written many weavings all based on love. So I guess you could say I am a lover of love and fantasy. yep that is it. Thanks so much for your comment. Balladeer okay you had me running to the dictionary to find that word'kudos' WOW!!I was very impressed that you would give me such a high compliment. I have read your work and feel honored that one of such talent would compliment me so. Thank you very much, my fellow romantic, I treasure your words. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Forests. meadows, man I loved this. and I wanted a kudos also, (candy) bar! What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*giggling with delight* Thank you so much Irish Rose, and the thing about kudos being a candy bar is much appreciated. Is it milk chocolate? mmmmm I hope so. thank you so much for your kind comments. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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mutington Member
since 2000-11-29
Posts 132New Jersey, USA |
** ABSOLUTELY FABULOUS STARTIME!!!!!!** ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ mutington |
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