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Tony Abbot
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0 posted 2000-11-28 07:10 PM


The precipice, in view again,
However hard I close my eyes,
Too scared to look into its depths,
I can't step back, but how I've tried.

I've crawled through barbed wire wastelands,
And seen rocks change shape with age,
As time and pressure have worn down their might,
I've waited for life to change the page.

I've faced the thunder and the night's abyss,
I've swallowed exile's acidulous pill,
And the cruellest thing, a taste of bliss,
That made these dark days, darker still.

And now the shroud of loneliness,
Descends like a miasmal mist,
With a bitter taste of misery,
I have made my solemn tryst.

In these times, I scavenge to find,
A cause to cling to or defend,
So that this struggle is more than just,
A means to a meaningless end.

Absorbed in myself, I don't usually hear,
The cries of those who suffer like me,
But now I find I share their fears,
And through this pain, there blossoms empathy.

When my gaze is turned on another's fate,
I'm released for awhile,from these ties that bind,
Finding solace, from easing souls,
And easing mine , through being kind.

If I live this way, a day will come,
When I can tightly grip this precarious ledge,
And with fervent courage and new found strength,
Crawl away from despair's insidious edge.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

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1 posted 2000-11-28 07:16 PM


Powerful piece, very powerful.  It bites with pain and misery.  Agony is at its soul.  The teller does seem to gain strength within the challenge/s faced.  Great piece!
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2 posted 2000-11-28 07:19 PM


Tony~ this is amazing  

"When my gaze is turned on another's fate,
I'm released for awhile,from these ties that bind,
Finding solace, from easing souls,
And easing mine , through being kind."

-SEA

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3 posted 2000-11-28 07:23 PM


Tony--lots of thought and feeling in this deep soul prodding piece...very well written!
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4 posted 2000-11-28 08:37 PM


This is excellent, Tony! Very well written!

Denise

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5 posted 2000-11-28 09:04 PM


Absorbed in myself, I don't usually hear,
The cries of those who suffer like me,
But now I find I share their fears,
And through this pain, there blossoms empathy.

When my gaze is turned on another's fate,
I'm released for awhile,from these ties that bind,
Finding solace, from easing souls,
And easing mine , through being kind.

If I live this way, a day will come,
When I can tightly grip this precarious ledge,
And with fervent courage and new found strength,
Crawl away from despair's insidious edge.
====================
this is written with such depth of expression and intensity of emotion ...
excellent as always... are your rhyme and cadence.
many truths are laced in this dark brooding
wisdom filled piece...
and your right...we can forget our pain for awhile when we reach out to others who are as lost as we are...
someone very special taught me that lesson
well done Tony...once again your work leaves a lasting impression
take care
jm

Sprayed across my heart and hers
Danced butterflies in the wild
This angel, this woman ,
who loves me with the innocence of a child.
~DeVante~

Tony Abbot
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6 posted 2000-11-30 10:40 AM


Thanks to all for replying.Glad you enjoyed it.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

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