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Paint Your World "Monet" (Ron's challenge to Green Polar Bear)
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Paint Your World "Monet" (Ron's challenge to Green Polar Bear) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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He painted once with vim and verve, unminding of the lines of curve. Skies glowed pinks, grass opaque, flowers splotched, every which way. Possessed by color, a rainbow page, the matrix dot of madman's rage. The critics came, critique verbose. They analyzed. They stood too close. "There are no lines." "It makes no sense." "No technique." "Talentless." As they shrugged and walked away, one glanced back and saw the grace of canvas sparkling with hue-- a world in kiss of morning dew... "How brave you are with palette knife!" The painter laughed and said, "that's life..." So if your world is black and grey. Take the time. Step back a pace. Confines of line are tricks of mind-- be brave, and paint your world "Monet". *I hope no one minds the 'borrow' from Poetry Challenge. I was getting desperate!" |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
How could anyone mind when you write with such beauty?!? This is FANTASTIC!!  - SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi serenity, i was the one who bumped the thread up and im pleased as punch that you turned his story into a poem.... thank you so much and oh, i liked the philosophical ending too  |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This is quite simply wonderful, love the poem and the message! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He painted once with vim and verve, unminding of the lines of curve. Skies glowed pinks, grass opaque, flowers splotched, every which way. ============ So if your world is black and grey. Take the time. Step back a pace. Confines of line are tricks of mind-- be brave, and paint your world "Monet". ============= did anyone ever tell you you are gorgeous when your desperate a true sign of a gifted poet is when they can write about ANYTHING...whether it is personal experience or emotion or not... and so it seems our moody muses took off together huh? well at least I know shes in good company and will have one hell of a good time... ONE of us should be...*winkiewinkie* love you me   < !signature--> Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 11-28-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
SEA---thank you much...fantastic work you're doing...love ya much. kaile--especial thanks to you for the inspiration---along with me thanks to Ron... Beki--my gratitude to you as well...hopefully will find time to read some more...sigh... and me Janet---y'know that I love ya for that? well, it's more than that...god bless, m'twin...just trying to find some joy in the shadow... Love to all, and later, good poet people!!! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow!! Very beautiful, Serenity! Denise |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity, how I adore your style of write... This is exquisite my dear and I believe JM says it perfectly... "a true sign of a gifted poet is when they can write about ANYTHING" and that you are... As always, thank you for the enjoyable read Coco |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Exactly as a challenge should be met...head on and with full vigor! Well done! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"outstanding" "perfect" "most beautiful" (i could go on and on and on - I absolutely love the way you've put Monet in poetry - Can I suggest you now move on to Georgia O'Keefe, Vincent Van Gogh, Casset - and whoever else strikes your fancy? |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is wonderful... along with your work, I get to enjoy some fond recollections from our earliest forum days... Green Polar Bear was one of our original moderators here - He's quite a good poet in his own right... You've done the challenge proud, serenity..  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
so lovely and of course I saved the pictures to my wallpaper, thank you for this one! "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Karen, ahhhhhh, so i caught you out being serious and learned ...lol... you know, i really really enjoyed this - it took me right back to a little trip jane and i did to the Musee de l'Orangerie in Paris and those amazing water lilies in the oval rooms .. ~sigh~ very well done P |
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