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The Kind you Can't Blow Out
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The Kind you Can't Blow Out |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Kind you Can’t Blow Out You know how I love a slivered moon nestled in the horizon like the curved side of forever It says look beyond what you see and see the circle still and even better shadowed in grace Continuance bubbles and does not break but changes ache to smile and breath to sigh and we can even measure it with the beat of the drum that foretells dance from shore to desert sand and fills the minute with meter and this is evidence of the sprit of forever is it not The slivered moon maybe you don’t know how it makes me brand new yet ancient in some layered time that has whispered in dreams of many moons and time that is fluid yet light as air and where color has no name and a song sings itself Is this the place where grace is born I have felt it simmer in my heart and I hear its laced call that fills all my listening as a child whispers her laughter down the stairs of knowing and so I just know that love never dies and that souls hold all the candles and they are the kind you can’t blow out |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You are NOT going to get me to say I like this one better than the Ethereal Music...you are NOT! I will fight it with all my might!  But, jeez, MArtie, those last lines are probably the best lines I've seen end a poem... in many slivered moons! This is SO well-done.... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ahhhh...so lovely, Martie! Lovely thoughts! Denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Martie, you moon dancer, you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I was waiting for this. When I was leaving work tonight - I said, "There's a Martie moon." A tiny slice of inspiration - and she'll write of it. 'The slivered moon maybe you don’t know how it makes me brand new yet ancient in some layered time that has whispered in dreams of many moons and time that is fluid yet light as air and where color has no name and a song sings itself' You did with such grace that it may become my new favorite - until you write the next one. This is just sooooooooooo beautiful. I will print it and share it with friends tomorrow. I love you, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Continuance bubbles and does not break but changes ache to smile and breath to sigh ========================= The slivered moon maybe you don’t know how it makes me brand new yet ancient in some layered time that has whispered in dreams of many moons and time that is fluid yet light as air and where color has no name and a song sings itself Is this the place where grace is born I have felt it simmer in my heart and I hear its laced call that fills all my listening as a child whispers her laughter down the stairs of knowing and so I just know that love never dies and that souls hold all the candles and they are the kind you can’t blow out ================ did you just KNOW how much I needed this tonight... I have not looked at the moon the same since first reading your luna tributes ... and this one takes that to a new level of awe this is pure unadulterated poetic heaven and it quiets my ache that needed to be held... >"Continuance bubbles and does not break but changes ache to smile and breath to sigh<" that is one of the most poetically perfect lines and one of the coolest my eyes have danced upon... >"and so I just know that love never dies and that souls hold all the candles and they are the kind you can’t blow out"< and for this verse of grace I will simply say thank you for and you will already know why. I take this poem, and your moon and the quiet comfort I found in your grace of verse to bed with me tonite. thank you for that as well. love you poet of exception me Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is such a phenomenal poem.... filled with azure beauty as that of a crescented moon, a slivered moon, it is .... so MARTIESQUE and even more... regards, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Absolutely fabulous poem Martie!! Wow! It just kind of stole my whole being away from reality to deep into my perspective and you were leading me by the hand...there are so many incredible lines in this poem that I can't even begin to quote a favourite..... write on sweet poet write on!! ethome |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martie, this is magic, utterly poetical magic. Just WOW I love this utterly Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Martie* This is so amazing! Your words glide like silk and touch my heart with their softness and beauty. What a gift you hold in the ink well of your heart...we are truly blessed that you share it with us~ The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderful Martie! I'll never look at the moon the same way again...I'll always see it through your eyes... jwesley |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer--I'm glad you like them both and if the last stanza pleased you, I'm pleased, cause I think the last should. (PS--You are so cute) Denise--Thanks for the lovely reply. Karilea--Yep, that's me! Marge--Funny, when I saw it I thought...I must write a slivered moon poem for Marge.  Janet--I was thinking of people who lose those they love...I am so glad this comforted you sweet one. Hi Sudhir--I have missed your replies...thank you for reading this one and for such a sweet reply. ethome--Your reply sure made me smile...thanks dear man. Marsha--I love it when you get all mushy...thanks. Butterflies---we are all blessed to be able to share our poetry in this wonderful place...thanks for such a lovely response. jwesley--I'm glad ...that slivered moon is a special one. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
excuse me one sec martie: Marge quote: quote: what marge - you WORK as well!!! geez  ~~~~~~~ ok martie - sorry couldn't resist that - humm where was i ...yep the poem... going against the flow here a bit i suppose when i say that although i liked it, i liked the sound and flow of it more than the content - although the second stanza was exceptional. I guess it's just my old prejudice against souls and moons (slivered or not) - which is kinda hypocritical seeing as i just wrote something which ended with the word moon .....lol - well there ya go philip |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Oh my- like 'deer - I'm consternated - - so many favorites - so hard to order them - this has to be at or near the top this is soooooooo beautiful - I haven't adequate words to describe how much I love it. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Martie-Your words here are captivating, flowing and sensitive thoughts. I think I may have to add this to one of my favorites as well. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Philip--You leave Marge alone, you hear! It's okay if you don't like souls and moons, I know they are used alot...I'm glad you liked it anyway...can I read your moon poem? Bill--I am blushing at your exuberance...thank you so much...glad to see you back. Gemini--Thank you so much for you lovely reply...to be added to your library would be an honor...thank you. |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
This is very good..fantastic last strophe.Thanks. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You my friend OWN the images of nature and the path to total enlightment. Gawd this is so lovely. I could never tell you in mere words the beauty of this one and it has so many lines in it that could rewrite and make poetic history on their own that I am left in total awe. This one is the perfect one to take me to bed tonight whether I sleep or not. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Tony--thank you so much..I'm glad you liked it. Mark--I'm so glad to see you...thank you for such wonderful words you always find...you are a very special cowboy!! sleep tight! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is perfect. . . Just perfect. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Continuance bubbles and does not break but changes ache to smile and breath to sigh and we can even measure it with the beat of the drum that foretells dance from shore to desert sand and fills the minute with meter and this is evidence of the sprit of forever is it not The slivered moon maybe you don’t know how it makes me brand new yet ancient in some layered time that has whispered in dreams of many moons and time that is fluid yet light as air and where color has no name and a song sings itself Is this the place where grace is born I have felt it simmer in my heart and I hear its laced call that fills all my listening as a child whispers her laughter down the stairs of knowing and so I just know that love never dies and that souls hold all the candles and they are the kind you can’t blow out ===================================== needed to read this amazing poem again... each time I do..I see something more in it and find more of the me I've lost along the way... thank you for that ... and for allowing me to climb your "stairs of knowing"  meThis distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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