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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2000-11-27 10:42 AM


... a bit too disgruntled, perhaps, but then...
... thanks for understanding that this is not a political statement ...
... just me being me with my lines of rambling ...
.
..
...
Old man in the corner
watched
deserted streets
from the corner
of his eyes --
bleary and tired,
wet, soaking up
rain outside
pouring
down
rain inside
tears
tearing apart
haphazard emotions
knocking the soul
stirring
moving
in motionless
quiet, aloofed
cornered by fate
left alone
as he felt an arrest
and up heaved his chest
pumping once --
the last time
one breath left
last gasp
and all he thought was
"heaven or hell,
why care?"
and the light left
darkness loomed
tall
seemlessly quiet
deathly silence
descends

shhhh…

Another one bit the dust

Day two
and they found
a wet mass
of a grief-struck body
lying in coldness
eyes
shutting out the world
swollen ears
keeping out
pained sounds of a war-child's cry
jaws
gripping each other
biting cold
gritting teeth
as if reaffirming silence

A lamb amongst a pack of wolves

Hey, they just dropped a bomb
and there are kids playing
innocent,
soon-to-be-victims
of an unknown cause
searching
a non-existent freedom

Shhhh…
don't say this aloud
they will get you for speaking out
costs a lot, careful with your mouth, son

Hey! Wait,
let's get a new king,
let's do it good,
let's make them feel jealous of
our freedom
of expression and choice
let's make one fool a winner,
(and get over with it)
got to watch the next ball-game
season starts sunday
major league,
got to eat the sausages
better get those warm with
a chilled can of
a favorite
drink

And
do you know that
a thousand kids were killed
when the nuke dropped
and they just boiled in that furnace...

Ah! forget about it,
let's worry
if the pinks will win
or maybe the reds.

Shall I toss the coin?

Hey mother,
the reds won
see mother,
the sky is lit red,
and the green grass
is floating on
dark maroon shiny liquid!

Mother,
is that how blood stinks?

Knock, knock, knock!
who's there?

wake up...

the dream's finished
but the nightmare
just seems to go
on and on
and on
and
...
..
.





[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 11-27-2000).]

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Startime
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
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1 posted 2000-11-27 10:48 AM


BRAVO!!!!Such power and message behind these talented words. If only they could be heard by all and not fall on ears closed to anything but their own pleasure. Fantastic. A message we all need to hear. Thank you so much for sharing.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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missouri
2 posted 2000-11-27 11:16 AM


It is so good to find you back among us...and with such a powerful scary write...is this what our future holds? Just the past repeated endlessly? Havent we learned ANYTHING?
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
3 posted 2000-11-28 06:10 AM


Startime and Paula,
Thank you so much for sharing your views... and appreciative words...

My regards,
sudhir

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

4 posted 2000-11-29 08:48 PM


Sudhir, I really liked this, what profound thought and you've put it so well together.

What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman



doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
5 posted 2000-11-29 08:57 PM


quote:
and all he thought was
"heaven or hell,
why care?"


this is profound in the trip from one expose to the next - i want to put it to film.. i can see it -- it will be a very artistic piece... a combination of film, social statement, poetry.. it's a fabulous write, sudhir!! thank you for sharing this

one day, when i get my multi-media thing going, i'll contact you to put this on film... then... and THEN... we'll put it on my new website (news about that later *wink*)

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
6 posted 2000-12-04 03:38 AM


Kathleen,
Thanks so much for reading and sharing what you think...

Doreen,
Imagine a video shoot with life as general in normal speed and then these shots in super slow motion, almost stilling life and stalling our thoughts causing a perturbing regret to the way we lead it... yep, anytime, my friend you would like a screen play for this, to put it on film... I am up for it... atleast I can be proud of myself when I am old and weary... Thanks a lot for your time and thoughts on this one, Doreen... I appreciate your response a lot...

My regards to all,
Sudhir

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