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Her Gilded Cage
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Her Gilded Cage |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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Her Gilded Cage On gentle breeze, I used to soar, The vast expanse of evermore ... With windswept currents 'neath my wings, A song in heart, I'd sweetly sing. My feathered tips would dip and sway, While swiftly gliding cares away; Above the clouds, so strong and free, 'Tis there I lived a fantasy. A glory to behold, was this, And yet, I only reminisce; For now, in gilded cage, I perch, 'Twas plucked from heaven, fell to earth. *** He watches from the other side, To view his treasure ... captured pride; He sees the surface, not the soul, That weeps from tireless control. Her wings are clipped, her heart is scarred, 'Tis lonely there within the bars; Her strength is ebbing, put to test, Her song now silenced ... laid to rest. /Kit McCallum |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Does a bird that used to be free still sing? Beautifully done Kit.  |
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Witch's Brat Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 100 |
Kit, after reading that I don't see how anyone can say your poems don't make sense. That made perfect sense, and it was so painfully sad. Wonderful work. W.B. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Kit~ This is so sad. As a true lover of birds - I can feel the silencing of the song. I believe you've written a lovely piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kit- this is so beautifully written..  i can hear the sadness in this poet's song...a song to lovely to be silenced... 'He watches from the other side, To view his treasure ... captured pride; He sees the surface, not the soul, That weeps from tireless control.' in the soul, is the strength to keep the song alive...sing on, my friend. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Greg_s Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 36Los Angeles, CA |
This is a very well written poem. It is with clear emotion and tact. I liked it very much. It reminds me of another poem that I read in a Spanish class once called "Hombre Pequenito" with similar theme, about a caged bird. Well done. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
So beautiful, so sad. Excellent work Kit. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Very sad Kit we are all meant to be free, anything that's caged leads a life of sadness and lonliness very well penned dear Kit..well done ~HUG~ Tracie~  < !signature-->Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 11-27-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Kit, I got the wire cutters... we'll break you out of their.. Wonderful poem, though sad in its meaning. Maybe the bird should fly toward blue sky's for don't we truly have the key to our own freedom. Parker |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kit, I would fly into a rage If someone put YOU in a cage. Your spirit must be wild and free To give the world your poetry. I must admit, one couldn't get A nicer, warmer, loving pet But some small cage is not for you Just be at Passions - we love you! FLORIDA: Home of electile dysfunction! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh now you have me remembering and missing again my lovely Chico...who always did his parakeet best to buzz bomb and fly into the cat's mouth...on purpose! Thank you Kit! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Beautifully written Kit, though sadly so. jwesley |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Kit! We have to be free to truly sing! Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Caged birds WILL sing, if only to call to the other birds...sigh...Thank you much, for this one Kit. Sadly, I could relate. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love this one Kit ... if there ever was anyone who believed in the free spirit of nature I think it's me.....I love your tenderhearted delivery...wonderful visions of freedom of the wild swam through my head and I could pass a tear when it comes to this subject...thanks for sharing such a beautiful poignant protest...take care...et(no snow in N.B.)home |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kit, beautifully expressed. Write on Kethry. Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thanks so much each and every one. I'm sorry I don't have time to reply to everyone individually tonight, but "work duty" calls ... sigh ... I wish reality and fantasy were reversed some days. Very much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Oh my gosh!!!! This is absolutely I loved every word Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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