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Master
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0 posted 2000-11-26 04:48 PM



“...and gaze at the reflection in the mirror,
As streetlights gaze at drying puddles...”
J. Brodsky

Draw in the smoke and with the motion of a finger,
shake off the lazy fireflies, which often linger
to burn to ash. Cold bathroom lights reveal your flaws,--
the bald spot in your hair, the crooked nose...
Breathe out the smoke, and nothing’s to be seen,
except the rows of plastic bottles, -- blue and green
colognes and creams and other useless stuff,
which you still use in hopes of luring in true love.
The smoky mirror hides your grim reflection,
and now, none of your flaws remain...
Thus streetlights watch with warm affection
the puddles blurred by drops of rain.


Check out my poetry here:


http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet


© Copyright 2000 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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1 posted 2000-11-26 05:08 PM


I really enjoyed this one......very dream-like....... -SEA
Master
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2 posted 2000-11-26 09:55 PM


Thank you SEA, I'm glad you liked it...
Beki
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3 posted 2000-11-27 04:41 PM


"The smoky mirror hides your grim reflection,
and now, none of your flaws remain...
Thus streetlights watch with warm affection
the puddles blurred by drops of rain."

Loved these ending lines! This was a good read my friend, and hey, it was good to see your icture, too....now I knows whatcha looks like  

Master
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4 posted 2000-11-27 08:48 PM


Thanks Beki, I'm actually a lot more handsome than that picture may suggest... lol
Sunshine
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5 posted 2000-11-28 09:35 PM


I like this Master....

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Master
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6 posted 2000-12-17 08:27 PM


Thanks Beki! Glad you liked it!
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