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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-11-26 03:35 AM



Cryptic message sent from you
to decipher it has been a task
Many questions linger here
left unanswered and unasked

Inside this heart of loneliness
I cry for the flame you tender
Should I take the light you offer
give in, give up, surrender?

Fear locks this poetic voice
words linger quietly unsaid
Afraid to find they won’t be welcome
my heart ruled by my head

If you can find the key to me
I welcome the opening of my heart
But please, if this is just a game,
just stop before you start.

I can face this feeling for you
with time to be sure it’s real
How did you ever know, my friend
That is the way I feel?



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suthern
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1 posted 2000-11-26 03:58 AM


'Cause friends understand the things we DON'T say. *S* I like this, PDV!
ethome
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2 posted 2000-11-26 06:17 AM


Great description of a heart of lonliness with a great big gaurd up around it....but a gaurd that the person with the lonely heart wants to be rid of...very nice writing... I thoroughly enjoyed it.......ethome
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3 posted 2000-11-26 08:13 AM


Hi Poet deVine,

Words of wisdom spoken here, this is wonderful.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



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4 posted 2000-11-26 11:38 AM


I think that ethome hit it right on the head deVine. . .

We want to get rid of that guard. . . to open up again. . .

This shows it perfectly. . .  

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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5 posted 2000-11-26 11:45 AM


*sigh*I truly hope tis not a game played with such a beautiful heart as I see within these words. Such sadness of loneliness mixed with such a hope that love is being offered. *sigh*beautifully written and very heartfelt.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com

Denise
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6 posted 2000-11-26 02:19 PM


Very good, Sharon! I enjoyed this!

Denise

Poet deVine
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7 posted 2000-11-26 07:58 PM


Thank you for your kind replies...it's wonderful to know I got my message across in this. Hard to say what you feel in poetic verse when you could just come right out and say it!!!
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8 posted 2000-11-27 03:55 PM


Sharon...SCREAM IT FROM THE MOUNTAINTOPS...DIVE INTO THE OCEAN NAKED!!!!

(I know I've said that before, but I think I just like typing it...lol)

This is so demure and sweet, demure, but still full of longing!  A lovely verse!!!

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9 posted 2000-11-27 04:06 PM


quote:
If you can find the key to me
I welcome the opening of my heart


Wow, great work...I can relate.

Elizabeth

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10 posted 2000-12-13 02:43 PM


Enjoy this much!!!!!!!!!!
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11 posted 2000-12-14 10:31 AM


Hi Sharon, can I just say...GO FOR IT!!!
grab a piece of happiness offered. And if it doesn't work out, well you can cry on my shoulder as I have on yours.
(but I bet it will   )
Sandra

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12 posted 2000-12-14 10:54 AM


A lonely heart with doubts and fears is one that has a scar or two.
Time, that's the key.

Good poem, full of heartfelt emotions.
Liked it much.
Deb

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13 posted 2000-12-14 11:49 AM



Hi PdV,

This was a wonderful read ... I really really liked it ...


~verve

artsygrl
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14 posted 2000-12-14 01:02 PM


this eerily echoes a situation in my own life..Makes me stop to see another view..thankyou!!!!!!!
p.s. in my own situation I sent an unsure email saying we were better friends because I was unsure what he thought.. and thought that is what he wanted to hear..sucks when both argree when really they both want to be more stupid I know for me to do, but food for thought.

artsygrl

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15 posted 2000-12-14 01:13 PM


This just fits so well into my heart right now...thank you sweet lady
Lady Lightning
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16 posted 2000-12-14 02:33 PM


OOH OOH OOH...I really liked this..  
Especially these two lines..

If you can find the key to me
I welcome the opening of my heart

Most surely a keeper..    ~LL~



The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

JamesMichael
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17 posted 2000-12-14 03:06 PM


Very nice Poet DeVine...James
shira
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18 posted 2000-12-14 03:15 PM


Very very nice... I really liked this.
Mark Bohannan
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19 posted 2000-12-14 03:50 PM


I hope that they take the time to find the key as you said and that you find the only game you are playing is the one of love romping in the fields of spring.  Lovely and tender write from a longing and sincere heart.

A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses.
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20 posted 2000-12-14 06:58 PM


'Inside this heart of loneliness
I cry for the flame you tender'

Great writing!  Love this!!

sp  


'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

jwesley
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21 posted 2000-12-14 07:51 PM


WOW!  I, too, love this...very much

jwesley

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