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Brown Butterflies
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Brown Butterflies |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The green has turned brown, Fluttering leaves in chill winds Winter butterflies. I watch them, Brown and laced white with the frost, And the wind, Will catch them, Into the air with care tossed And they spin; Children play Rushing through the mounds of leaves, Diving in, All the way, Bursting out and spirits free, Leaves trailing, The wind starts them to dancing. The early dark comes, Frosty windows hide the view, The wind dances on. Gloom |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and the season's song is sung... I like this one... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Superb imaging!!! Wasn't sure I wanted to stop here, your pen name, Professor Gloom, made me unsure I wanted to begin my day that way. However, your poem was anything but gloomy, it was gentle, reflective. Thanks! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Sunshine, For taking the time to read and respond. Thank you, VAS, Glad you took the chance of this books cover And that you liked the words within. Gloom |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
"Brown and laced white with the frost," How interesting that you have chosen to portray the browning leaves as autumn's butterflies. Your words add a bit of tenderness to the season. Lovely writing, thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Rainydays, Glad you liked the metaphor, Came to me while looking out my window And remembering the spring so long ago. Gloom |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I greatly admire a mind that comes up with a metaphor like this one....takes a poet to do that. Hats off to you, sir!  |
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raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
This pome was a real treat for me. It brought back many good memories of whene i was a chiled in NH. I miss the day's whene we would rake the levas only to play in them. Thank you for the reminder and the plesant read. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Balladeer Your words are kind and we all use metaphors Comparing one thing to another, Bring the new to things we knew before. Thank you, raleighbttrfly Glad you liked it and it brought a memory. Gloom |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ProfessorGloom~ I greatly enjoyed this little penning. How glorious your brown butterflies came to life. Wonderful - just wonderful imagery. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Marge Images overlay in time, From when the Butterflies were chased by little hands, Till the leaves released from the grasp of trees, Imitating as best they can to fly before little fingers. Gloom |
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