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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Old man clings to his memories, The fragments of the past, Clutching pictures,wet with tears, A sadness that still lasts. Mourning for so many, Silently,he groans, A wretched body that keeps him here, In misery,alone. Awake at dawn,he listens, Waiting for the postman's call, Craving human contact, He hardly sees a soul at all. His days are cast in darkness, Slipping in and out of sleep, In his lucid moments, He looks around and starts to weep. He emerges from his slumber, And imagines a knock at the door, Desperate to answer,he rises too quickly, And falls face down on the floor. A policeman breaks the door down, An awful smell,they said, Poor old man,he must have fell, Three weeks he's been dead. Old man,he is young now, For,in truth,he never died, Reunited with his loved ones, On the other side.< !signature--> 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot [This message has been edited by Tony Abbot (edited 11-24-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Leaving open always the question, do we live in our dreams, or dream what we have lived...and in death, are we gone, or has our spirit only moved on? I like this sad piece! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
that was lovely pome even tho it was sad. I realy liked your viwe on death and the other side that is a grate why to see it |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Thank you both for replying. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
This is a very sad poem and my heart broke for the man but your ending had me smile for now he will never know loneliness again. Thank you so very much for the read, I truly enjoyed it. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Glad you enjoyed it,Startime. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
its always a shame that so many old people are lonely....you catured the lonelyness very good...... well done Charisma |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You have touched on one of the saddest times in a persons life...when they have outlived all who love them...and there is no one left to care...beautifully sad and yet there is hope |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Geesh...you ripped my heart to pieces, and put it back together at the end. Excellent work. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TonyA~ This is a haunting look at lonely. Sadly, too many live it to their end. Or ... is that their beginning ? Nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Thanks Charisma,Temptress,Paula and Marge. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tony, Enjoyed the words Enjoyed the rhyme A little curd But worth the time. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
a very scary thought to be alone..nicely written Tony..with a beautiful ending..  *on the other side*~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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