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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-11-24 01:48 PM


Heart of Crystal

such is it as she has
transparency, most brilliant form
likened to diamonds’ norm
with exception, see the
simplest rejection
of heart break, so forlorn

as
in her
inner chi
shines this
shimmer
of light
sigh

there is not a crystal ball
that holds the inner truths so well
something once seen, heard like a bell
something of life she would tell
could she break past the crystal wall
could you but hear the call

as
in her
inner chi
shines this
shimmer
of light
sigh

were you to study crystallography
or even her given autography
and dispel any and all mystery
would you therein find serenity
or just her lovesome memory
in her heart of crystal beauty

as
in her
inner chi
shines this
shimmer
of light
sigh

and grown from pure crystallite
her charms for you would crystallize
a vision of beauty before your eyes
and you would wear her light
and catch the rainbow of her bright
and then you would hear her sigh

but
in her
inner chi
shines this
shimmer
of light
sigh





Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

1 posted 2000-11-24 02:03 PM


This is truly beautiful, beautiful in every sense of the word!!!!!!!!


What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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2 posted 2000-11-24 02:09 PM


your muse is all aglow again my dear...
this is so cool..
so crytic and mystic and full of illusion and vision ...
very well written and presented Sun.
beautiful indeed.
jm

Marsha
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3 posted 2000-11-24 02:36 PM


Kari, applause, kudos, and loud cheers. Whenever I think you must have produced your very best, you present another that is better and so on and so on. Love this one I really do. It is a reflection of your souls beauty, and it truly is.
Take care
               MM
                


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Balladeer
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4 posted 2000-11-24 02:39 PM


AH, crystal....so beautiful, so delicate, so shining...with so many facets.

Dear sunshine, let me make it clear
If you would be my chandelier
My eyes would sparkle 'neath your brilliant glow
My darkness will forever fade
Due to the difference you have made
So thank you...I just wanted you to know  

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
5 posted 2000-11-24 03:27 PM


Sunshine,
You  have ligtened my days
And have changed my ways.
You are a facetted gem
On a roses stem.
*L* Sy

Sunshine
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6 posted 2000-11-24 07:51 PM


Kathleen, warm praise indeed, thank you...

Janet Marie, I borrowed her from you for a light time, thank you for lending...

Marsha, you spoil me so...truly...thank you...

'Deer...Sybil had facets too...perhaps we should be wary...{~,^}...but thank you, Sir!...

Sy, I will always like you just as you are...but if I have lightened anything, I hope it has been your spirit...thank you...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Sven
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7 posted 2000-11-24 08:04 PM


these words not crystal,
but diamond surely

pure diamonds. . .  

---------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Sunshine
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8 posted 2000-11-24 08:12 PM


Sven,
for you a marquise
cut line and a
thank you
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Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ





[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-24-2000).]

DreamSeeker
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since 2000-11-17
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9 posted 2000-11-24 08:19 PM


Blooming Roses
Grasp The Trestle
A Place Firm To Hold

Held So Close
The Flowers Grow
Beyond Expectations

To Pure
Showering Radiance
Upheld By UniquePermanence

Sunshine
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10 posted 2000-11-24 08:23 PM


DreamSeeker...this is amazing...
wow...I am overwhelmed,
thank you...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
11 posted 2000-11-25 12:01 PM


Your pen has once again dipped into my heart
and found the tears that don't often fall as
of late...this is beautifully done and the
format calls out for it to be read slowly
and absorbed...so very delicate and beautiful
and yet so sad and fragile...excellent
weaving~


[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 11-25-2000).]

LoveBug
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12 posted 2000-11-25 12:26 PM


This is an amazing piece. I love the format and the flow of your beautiful words. You are an extremely talented poet, and we are lucky to have you in our mist!   Thanks for posting.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Startime
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
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13 posted 2000-11-25 12:57 PM


Delicate as crystal and strong as tempered glass is the very heart of this poem. Beautiful and a fantastic read. Thank you so much for sharing.


Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
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Ala bam a
14 posted 2000-11-25 01:04 AM


You have a heart of crystal,
so we've all been told,
Better than the cardiac organ
Of one like mine so cold,

Broken, split and cold as ice,
Regret has torn it loose,
I have but one small beat left,
Enough to play the blues.

Your poem is done with eloquence,
Your thoughts are true to heart,
I wish I could relate this way,
I'm just not quite this smart.

My heart has little feelings left,
My mind's one great big blur
I wish my heart would beat it's last,
and this was my last word.

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 11-25-2000).]

Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
15 posted 2000-11-25 02:12 AM


SunShine...
This is a true gem!  
I read this over and over....and enjoyed every word.



~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"



Sunshine
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16 posted 2000-11-25 07:20 AM


Butterflies, you are right, to be read slowly, so that all women would for a moment see themselves...

Lovebug, we've all been quite fortunate to find many wonderful words in this vast gallery of poets...thank you...

Startime, thank YOU for joining Passions! A warm welcome, and I hope you enjoy many delightful days and nights as you come to read and write...

Toe, we love your funny bone...there is no one else like you...but I'm sorry that you're going...through these terrible holiday blues...come and join these your friends, come and be of good cheer...yes these words come easy enough, and they should last throughout the year...  Hugs to you, my friend...thank you for reading...

Irie, thank you for adding this sparkle...



Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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