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Alexander
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0 posted 2000-11-23 11:33 PM


HEAVEN IN MY HEART

Deep within your privacy, you stand there locked and bound,
I see inside, a glimpse of you, and yearn for what I’ve found.
A thousand paces left behind, and many more to tread,
The key that holds my destiny is somewhere in your head.
Your writings show the words you hide, and now I do the same,
This poem reveals a lighted truth that sparks this inner flame.
Caught in-between a fantasy and all that you reveal,
I sit here holding onto these emotions that I feel.
Your eyes, your smile, your laughter, is fixed deep inside my mind,
I’m scared to hope, because of what the future days might find.
Is this the road we wished for, as we stand here at the start ?
Or just another window in an ever-breaking heart.
I look inside this crystal ball, but clouds are all I see,
Covering tomorrow and the way it’s meant to be.
At least for now, I’ll hold on to the things I know are real,
A vision of a woman that nobody else can steal.
Sometimes in life we loose ourselves and don’t know what to do,
Sometimes we stand and face up to a feeling that is true,
It seems I hold a treasure here, of which I’ll never part,
Your face is always heaven in my heart…


copyright:alexander:november:2000


Alexander

© Copyright 2000 Alexander - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 2000-11-24 12:12 PM


Wow. I know that's a stupid word to use for such a beautiful poem but words escape me for some reason. From the first word to that last killer line, this speaks volumes. I hope that the lady you seek is worthy of your tender feelings and that she appreciates the depth of your heart. Thank you for sharing this with us.
wayoutwalt
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2 posted 2000-11-24 12:29 PM


Alexander another lame word for this poem: AWESOME. wow i loved it that was superb excellent welcome sad i missed your first post hope to see lots more in the future
Denise
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3 posted 2000-11-24 10:31 AM


Absolutely beautiful, Alexander!! The person this was written for is a very lucky person!!

Denise

Sunshine
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4 posted 2000-11-24 10:37 AM


Alexander, the tender shows through...well done...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Irish Rose
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5 posted 2000-11-24 10:55 AM


I believe I missed your first post but let me welcome you to Passions.  This is so moving and emotional without being overly sentimental.  It's just a testimony of faith in believing in someone.  Well done.


What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman


WhtDove
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6 posted 2000-11-24 11:01 AM


This is one AWESOME poem!!  It flows so well, and just captures the reader!  
I really don't know what else to say, I'm in awe. Left not knowing just how to describe this.  AWESOME!

Tiersdin
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7 posted 2000-11-24 11:08 AM


Alexander, it's so good to read you again. this is a beautiful addition to your poetry.

*smiles*
-Tier{R.T.}

vandana
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8 posted 2000-11-24 11:09 AM


Welcome to passion!!!!!!!Nice poem.
~unwanted~
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9 posted 2000-11-24 11:09 AM


That was a beautiful pome really emotional and deep keep up the terific work ~§erena~

love is blind and it will take control of your mind what you think is love is truely not ~Eve~

Janet Marie
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10 posted 2000-11-24 02:53 PM


Deep within your privacy, you stand there locked and bound,
I see inside, a glimpse of you, and yearn for what I’ve found.
A thousand paces left behind, and many more to tread,
The key that holds my destiny is somewhere in your head.
Your writings show the words you hide, and now I do the same,
This poem reveals a lighted truth that sparks this inner flame.
Caught in-between a fantasy and all that you reveal,
I sit here holding onto these emotions that I feel.
Your eyes, your smile, your laughter, is fixed deep inside my mind,

=================
It seems I hold a treasure here, of which I’ll never part,
Your face is always heaven in my heart…
===============
this is outstanding...
exceptional poetry...perfect rhyme.
wonderful writing and gift of expression
take care
jm

There are moments ...
when I Love you
beyond the limits of my human heart ...

...you will always be mine.

Collin Raye


Sven
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11 posted 2000-11-24 08:01 PM


This poem speaks on so many levels. . . it is truly the work of a heart that wants to know a love. . .

Excellent. . . welcome to Passions my friend. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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12 posted 2000-11-25 09:29 AM


Had to come back and read it again. This is wonderful.
JamesMichael
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13 posted 2000-11-25 04:38 PM


Fantastic writing...James
Startime
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14 posted 2000-11-25 04:43 PM


*sigh* yes heaven indeed is found in your heart. This is a beautiful love poem and I hope the lady you write it to returns the amazing love you have for her in your heart. Thank you so much for sharing.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com

Charisma
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15 posted 2000-11-25 04:49 PM


*sigh*.....reading these wonderful words....several times before I replied....
breathetaking piece, .....and welcome to passions.....looking forward for more

Charisma

Celeste
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16 posted 2000-11-26 01:09 PM


My friend......I have so missed you.  

(Kellie)

To capture and live a moment is truly living

Nan
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17 posted 2000-11-26 08:32 PM


It seems that good poetry just doesn't go unnoticed - Does it, Alexander???...


Dark Angel
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18 posted 2000-11-26 09:04 PM


Alexander, Welcome to Passions!
I really loved your poem, so much longing and very beautifully said as well, flowed
wonderfully  

Maree

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

serenity blaze
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19 posted 2000-11-27 07:57 PM


well I hope it's not too late to stand in line and applaud this....geez...who are you, and where have you been?

This is great...more please!

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
20 posted 2000-11-29 11:37 PM


words from the heart are always nice


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Rosebud1229
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21 posted 2000-11-29 11:48 PM


I found the perfect word to describe this piece of art, heavenly,
I enjoyed each and every line look forward to reading more.

doreen peri
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22 posted 2000-12-02 10:50 AM


Excellent writing!  
VAS
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23 posted 2000-12-02 10:57 AM


Wonderful, Alexander, great couplet!  At least I think it still is even though there's no space between each pair of lines.  I'm sure it's because it's rhymed pairs of lines, right?

Are you the Alexander that I met at Papa's or Artistry?  If so, very good to see you!!  

Sincerely,
Virginia

CocoBaci
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24 posted 2000-12-03 09:19 PM



Alexander, this is a beauty of a poem and I shall be threading this into my library...

And by the way, welcome to this sweet place of treasured friends and I'll be keeping my eyes open for more of your poems...

coco

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