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Love-struck romeo... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Frothy foam-filled waves hit the shore, As spring tides come flowing in scores, And we lay there close together, And my head rests on your shoulder. The teasing waves tickle our toes, While the breeze caresses my nose, The sun slowly starts floating down, While the sky wears a crimson gown. Castles in clouds put their lights on, As the starry sparklers switch on, The night draped in glowing surrounds, Life feels like happy dreams abound. And we lay there close together, Loving hands wrapped around each other, And my thoughts only belong to you, And my love is honest and true. Then I stare into your green eyes, Mistily smiling at me in sighs, And I feel my eyes smiling too, Showering all my love on you. Through your eyes I see a kind soul, Sea of love in your crystal bowl, And I place my life's paper boat, In those loving waters to float. The breeze now blows fully content, This flapping heart waves its consent, As your fingers caress my hair, I just continue with my stare. I hope you see love in my eyes, Forever like the stars in the skies. ~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Love and sunset at the beach...the most wondrous of combinations for poetry! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Romance is indeed one of life's immeasurable pleasures...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, Sudhir beloved one, I like you like this, sooo romantic.  write on Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sudhir...this is a lovely, gentle romantic reverie...made me think "mmmmmm...." and it is a joy to be seeing you more often! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Sudhir! you are really writing beautiful love poems these days....man oh man they're good.... "Through your eyes I see a kind soul, Sea of love in your crystal bowl, And I place my life's paper boat in those loving waters to float." What a beautiful poetic expression of trust! Write on Romeo!!!!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Sudhir! you are really writing beautiful love poems these days....man oh man they're good.... "Through your eyes I see a kind soul, Sea of love in your crystal bowl, And I place my life's paper boat in those loving waters to float." What a beautiful poetic expression of trust! Write on Romeo!!!!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Then I stare into your green eyes, Mistily smiling at me in sighs, And I feel my eyes smiling too, Showering all my love on you. Through your eyes I see a kind soul, Sea of love in your crystal bowl, And I place my life's paper boat, In those loving waters to float. The breeze now blows fully content, This flapping heart waves its consent, As your fingers caress my hair, I just continue with my stare. I hope you see love in my eyes, Forever like the stars in the skies. ~ ================ OH MY... this is wonderful Sud, how romantic and lovely ... and such wonderful use of comparisons and metaphor with the ocean and emotions.. SUPERB penning Romeo ... your pen is well inspired while love-struck keep-em comming please later-got-it-bad--and-its-so-good-gator  jm There are moments ... when I Love you beyond the limits of my human heart ... ...you will always be mine. Collin Raye |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir, you write so well, considering that you are in love, and all.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh..romance from you Sudhir! Lovely sir (and a big smile for your romance!) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Powerful poem some wonderful lines. Ethome picked out the one I like best. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah, such a pleasure to see some of my most beautiful friends here turn up to say hi... Thank you all so much... and if not for the persistent lack of time, I would have had the honour of thanking each of your eloquent poets individually... Thanks for all your words of constant encouragements... and please forgive me for my bad manners of not being here much these days... My warmest regards, Sudhir |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* extremely romantic and beautifully written. This was such a loving, heartfelt poem and I loved reading it. Thank you so much. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh yes how sweetly beautiful...you do this so well...its good to have you back even if it is just for moments at a time |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Startime and Paula, Thank you so very much... and many regards, sudhir |
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Mereel79 New Member
since 2000-11-27
Posts 8Milwaukie, OR, USA |
A very beautiful poem, I hope to be able to express myself that well in my poetry one day. Our lives are better left to chance I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss the dance |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Oh sweet, sweet Romeo .... this is stunning ! 'The teasing waves tickle our toes, While the breeze caresses my nose, The sun slowly starts floating down, While the sky wears a crimson gown.' I love a sky in crimson gown. You've certainly written a beauty here. Love you and send my best regards to you. So very, very nice to see you, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Alright Sudhir. . . what's the big idea?? This is great my friend. . . you fit the picture of a love-struck Romeo perfectly!!! ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--Love is so wonderful...I'm so glad you are in it...you write such happiness in your poem I could feel it. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I am so sorry that I never got around to thank you wonderful people for your lovely responses... Mereel, of course you will, and I feel you definitely are right now... Thanks for such a high compliment... Marge, what a stunning person you are yourself... thanks so much for such fantastic words you always seem to reserve for me... O Sir Sven, perfectly is probably the way to fit in... thanks a lot, my friend for your ever-present support... Martie, I am extremely pleased that you felt the happiness and the happy thoughts.... Thanks a lot... Regards to all, and thanks for being patient with me, Sudhir |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Wow..How romantic and beautiful...~sigh~... Loved it...simply loved it... ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Glad to read and know your becoming even more romantic!!!! "Always be a first rate version of your self instead of a second rate version of someone else." Marilyn Monroe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So it is not really work that keeps our favored master of romance out of the forums these days. Wow my friend, talk about romance hung in the heavens. This was exquisitely penned in so much tenderness that even I am left in awe. So nice to see this side of you coming out these days. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Lady Lightning, Thanks for your Wow... I am glad that you liked this one... Kathleen, I am glad that you are glad... thanks so much... Mark, my friend, thank you so very much... and pssst ... it was work that prevented my forays into these realms of writing splendour... Regards to all, Sudhir |
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