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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-11-22 11:12 AM


It does me no good to cry

tears well
eyes shine
I would let it fall
but they refuse
no time
no way
no how
not today

just as I feel
the bite
the quick sting
of tears
then a string
of resolve
nips my back
stand straighter
take the flack


but if
oh if
I
could cry
just today
would come
to play
rainbows
in my eyes
in the crystalline guise
of tears
mesmerized

and I would
then smile at
the fact of me
the lack of me
walking the eggshell walk
in performance of the silent talk

for I shall always
know
that in my tears
I see
only
in rainbow



Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2000-11-22 11:17 AM


Sunshine,
Excellent writing. *L* Sy

OLIAS
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2 posted 2000-11-22 11:27 AM


I love this Sunshine especially the lines
in the crystalline guise
of tears
mesmerized

very envious, setting fire to my keyboard now!!

Regards,
Olias

suthern
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3 posted 2000-11-22 11:33 AM


I like this one very much, Sunshine... it speaks of strength. *S*
Tony Abbot
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4 posted 2000-11-22 11:35 AM


Beautiful piece,Sunshine,highly poignant and moving.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

Marsha
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5 posted 2000-11-22 11:36 AM


Kari, resounding applause, and cheers from me. Now come out onto center stage and take your curtsy, and smile. Brilliant work Kari love
Take care
               Majestic Marsha
                        


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Sven
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6 posted 2000-11-22 12:20 PM


That rainbow would be you. . .

excellent my friend. . .  

-----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


JamesMichael
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7 posted 2000-11-22 02:11 PM


I like the way you wrote this...made me think about times when I could not cry...I wanted to but I couldn't...and I would be thinking "why can't I cry".  But soon enough the tears would flow and they always help to soothe the soul...James
Paula Finn
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8 posted 2000-11-22 02:48 PM


Some tears arent worth crying Sunshine...but how do you know which ones? This is superb
CocoBaci
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9 posted 2000-11-22 05:08 PM


Sunshine, you know what caught me the most in your poem...
"For I shall always know that in my tears I only see rainbow"

Superb write Sunshine...

catalinamoon
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10 posted 2000-11-22 05:24 PM


Great, inspirational piece.  Very special.
Sandra

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11 posted 2000-11-22 05:34 PM


This is superb! My how you've grown here, my friend. It's rather exciting to watch!  
Sunshine
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12 posted 2000-11-22 10:59 PM


Sy...you shall forever bring to me one magnificent word...thank you

Olias, the keyboard is safe now, correct?...thank you

Suthern...strength, my lady, lies in you...my southern thanks...

Tony...poignant is such a huge word.... thank you...

Marsha, center? no...think not... but your star is rising...

Sven, rainbows are that when seen from another's eyes...thank you...

James...crying...please don't cry...when there is so much more to live for, but if they may, then I shall hope they sooth your spirit....

Paula...tears have been shed, yes, and sometimes we shall never know if they are shed for us or them, ...but living goes on...

Coco...rainbows live! I know one in particular, and she is remarkable....

Cat...you have been an inspiration...we will survive...you know this in your heart...

Sharon...growth...may be...may be not...all perspective, don't you think? But I revel in your kindness...and your belief...

thank you all....


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Saunni
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13 posted 2000-11-23 01:00 AM


Oh,this was perfect! I found it to be so well written and I'm sure many can relate. Thanks  

Sauni


Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Sunshine
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14 posted 2000-11-23 07:29 AM


Thank you so much, Saunni...relating is the whole experience, no?

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Butterflies_dont_cry
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15 posted 2000-11-23 07:40 AM


Our hearts seems to be laying in familiar
paths of late...your poetry is playing every
cord of my heart...this is so tender and
soft...filled with the message that is
etched within my own life...the need for
that cleansing is so deep at times...but the
promise to keep them in is stronger.  
Exquisite weaving from your heart to mine~


You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~

Sunshine
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16 posted 2000-11-23 07:51 AM


BDC, lift your wings, little one...it is most tender when sisters of the heart hear another...thank you...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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