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snowpants
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0 posted 2000-11-21 06:39 PM


It would be interesting
To see what would happen
If I turned off the wipers
For a while,
Let the rain accumulate
On the windshield.
Would it all stay the same?
See, I need fire
In this rain!
I need passion
In this silence!
Baby, I always thought
You were beautiful,
But you chose
To turn the other way,
Spurning my admiration.
Well, now I'm curious to see
How you would react
To my indifference.
Oh, how will things be
When I look away?
How are you going
To get along
When I no longer compensate?
Everything I had
Was obtained exclusively for you.
I can't help but wonder:
Where will you be
When you are inundated?


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

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SEA
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1 posted 2000-11-21 08:54 PM


SP~ I can totally relate to how this feels....excellent writing.   -SEA
snowpants
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2 posted 2000-11-22 10:52 PM


Thanks, SEA!  Glad you liked it!  

I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Beki
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3 posted 2000-11-23 04:56 AM


ouch!  well said!
Beki
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4 posted 2000-11-23 04:56 AM


ouch!  well said!
ethome
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5 posted 2000-11-23 04:14 PM


That's a real comeback a real slap ...but what goes around comes around(cliche)... good writing!
snowpants
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6 posted 2000-11-24 12:50 PM


Beki:  yeah, I thought so, too.  Thanks!!  

ethome:  yep.  i know.  Thanks!!  

sp


I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

vandana
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7 posted 2000-11-24 11:24 AM


Enjoy the read!!!!!!!!!!!
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