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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2000-11-21 08:16 AM



Today
on here
I came across a story
of a blind man,
not receiving much
in his hand hungry cup

a passerby poet, noticed
replaced his sign
with poetic words
to feed his needs
to overflowing care
it said:

"Today is the first day of spring
and I cannot see its beauty"

this touched me
and I thought
what about now,
Winter
and it's cold
are here

and yesterday
as the first flakes
had begun to fall
I thought of the words
captured in my mind
a replacement
for this season of change:

"Today the first snowflakes rested
And all I could do
was feel their kisses and imagine
the beauty of their fall."


~Wynter deeply inspired by your softness, Daniel




"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-11-21 08:37 AM


Today the first snowflakes rested
And all I could do
was feel their kisses and imagine
the beauty of their fall."
============
what an equisite verse and thought...
absolutely lovely ... "the beauty of their fall"...WONDERFUL poetic phrase.
take care
jm


There are moments ...
when I Love you
beyond the limits of my human heart ...

...you will always be mine.

Collin Raye


DreamSeeker
Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72

2 posted 2000-11-21 09:02 AM


Twas the Gift Of Heart
The Gift Of Self
That Broke The Bonds
Of Icy Purposefull Blindess

How Often Do We Simply
Turn Walk Hurry Away
Out Of Sight And Mind
Blinders Shackle Humanity

Yet Stumble On We
Calling Ourselves
Human


VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
3 posted 2000-11-21 09:51 AM


This is so tender and beautiful!!!  I love the kisses from the snowflakes in your poem.  I'm so chilled this morning that I only want to read about them, though.  I should be warmed as I am not one who is outside in the real cold.

I understand you replied to an accedental double post of mine that I had deleted.  "Whassup?"  I didn't get it read before it was deleted.  If you have time and desire to re-reply, I'd value your input.

Thanks for this lovely piece.
Virginia

Tiersdin
Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
4 posted 2000-11-21 11:33 AM


Beautiful...
enjoyed the read!

-Tier

Celeste
Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597

5 posted 2000-11-21 11:41 AM


Oh EXCELLENT!!!!!   Beautiful ending.....I just loved this.   Thank you so much for sharing.   Am tucking it away in my library  

To capture and live a moment is truly living

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2000-11-21 11:45 AM


What a wonderful verse of tender joy.  You have penned a real beauty that is sure to reach the hearts of many and your inspiration came from one that does the same with his poetry so applause to the both of you.
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
7 posted 2000-11-21 11:51 AM


This is just simply a beautiful warm and tender poem story and you have penned it with such poetic grace.....Daniel should be proud of you......ethome
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
8 posted 2000-11-22 05:41 AM


Janet Marie- thank you for reading  

Dreamseeker- and you,  thank you for  a nice poetic response..there are many times, I feel like walking away..when I see the stories of how some people today have jobs and are using sympathy to  make more money..but this one of Daniel's really touched me.

VAS- thank you and yes I thought it  cute and   responded so once again...

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
9 posted 2000-11-30 11:05 AM


Tier- glad you enjoyed *s

dreamkeeper- thank you for the "tucking away" it  brings a smile to these lips...huggzz

Mark-
thank you, yes it was Daniel's words that inspired me

E- you always "grace" me with your responses * I don't think Daniel knows I did this...* but that is ok...I loved his words

thank you everyone...

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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