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Lost Time |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
As I sit on the sand, Watching the waves come and go, The September breezes blow, Making everything grow cooler, I can remember when You once sat here beside me, Your arms wrapped around me; You spoke such tender words of love In my ear. As the sun begins to set, And everything grows darker, I lie back and gaze At the clear night sky. It seems a lifetime ago That you were here, Holding me as we looked up At God's gorgeous creation together. Where has it gone? Where are those times In which I felt your love so deeply? Now life is cold, Cool breezes blowing, Everything growing darker And unbelievably more lonely. The only reason I looked at the stars Rather than in your eyes Is the fact That they amazed you so. I wanted to discover Just what so mesmerized you. If not for that, Sweet Love, I would still be gazing Into your eyes, For the stars have nothing On the light in your soul. I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The only reason I looked at the stars Rather than in your eyes Is the fact That they amazed you so. I wanted to discover Just what so mesmerized you. If not for that, Sweet Love, I would still be gazing Into your eyes, For the stars have nothing On the light in your soul. ================== SP...this is is emotional and lovely ... beautiful imagery...laced with longing very well done. take care, jm |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I wonder if the person spoken in about in this poem really knew the heart of the writer... A sweet tale of longing... -Tier |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Very well said! I loved it!  The ending is very powerful. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
No time is lost if you are left with some sweet memories to hold on to. This is a very lovely though longing poem and I wish for you a warmth of a love that will light that fire of passion in you once again. Hugs to you my sweet friend. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lots of emotions circling down through these lines very well done poem....it reaches right out there and grabs ya!! ethome |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
JM: thank you! I'm glad you liked it! Tier: well, I'm not sure, my friend. Thanks!  dragonpoe: thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed! Mark: thank you, my friend, for your comforting words. You are too sweet. *HUGS* right back at 'cha!   ethome: grabs ya, eh? well, I'm glad you liked it!! Thanks!! sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Snowpants, Such a beautiful and sad poem. If he only really knew how you feel. "I can remember when You once sat here beside me, Your arms wrapped around me; You spoke such tender words of love" Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Thanks, Daniel! Yes, I know. Well, sometimes it's too late when they do realize. Glad you liked it! sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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