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Tony Abbot
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0 posted 2000-11-20 07:28 PM


As daylight gasps ever shorter breaths,
And the birds have swarmed to warmer climes,
I'm caught in amber, a state of frozen regret,
Silently passive in the slipstream of time.

The air hangs with tension unrelieved,
And bitterness has struck the bracken bare,
Our decay measured by the autumn leaves,
As they turned to the colour of despair.

This season of melancholy has numbed my senses,
All beauty blackened, cankered by my deeds,
Love endures little against its frail defences,
A flower that can only blossom far from weeds.

All seems lifeless and sombre,since you have gone,
The legacy of carefree, foolish days,
When I succumbed to the sweet siren's song,
The time worn trap of the tempter's gaze.

What force compels men to mire themselves in shame,
To fall from grace, as if it were their duty,
So few who can pull their fingers from the flame,
For all men are servile slaves of beauty.

Not heaven, but here, must we be redeemed from lust,
Let the chaste knight replace the fallen ,wounded king,
Now diadem and sceptre are infected with rust,
And eviscerate lands will flourish in the spring.

Though without your presence, verdure goes unseen,
Lacking the life-giving essence your spirit lends,
One day, you must return to your demesne,
Only then can I be sure this winter will end.

Now withered dreams have fallen to the ground,
And the boughs shake as the wind whispers your name,
That desolate howl, there is no such haunting sound,
May it bring you back to me again.



'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

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Denise
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1 posted 2000-11-20 08:53 PM


Wow! This is excellent, Tony! Very well written!!

Denise

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-11-21 12:23 PM


Not heaven, but here, must we be redeemed from lust,
Let the chaste knight replace the fallen ,wounded king,
Now diadem and sceptre are infected with rust,
And eviscerate lands will flourish in the spring.

Though without your presence, verdure goes unseen,
Lacking the life-giving essence your spirit lends,
One day, you must return to your demesne,
Only then can I be sure this winter will end.

Now withered dreams have fallen to the ground,
And the boughs shake as the wind whispers your name,
That desolate howl, there is no such haunting sound,
May it bring you back to me again.

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your writing is a gift to my eyes....
this is another exceptional piece of work from you..
your cadence and rhyme is so well done
this is awesome read aloud...
and again your unique vocabulary choices make the poem's grace...
add to that the imagery laced with with the melancholy essence of the emotions and it is poetic perfection.
excellent poet sir..truly
jm

Lloyd
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since 1999-06-16
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3 posted 2000-11-21 01:41 AM


Just excellent ! Rare insight, wonderful writing. Awesome !  I am so envious of your talent
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2000-11-21 03:05 AM


Perfect...James
Rainydays
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5 posted 2000-11-21 10:45 AM


Tony, hello. Such evocative reading, masterfully composed. Rich language, excellent meter, somber aire...lovely. Thank you ~

Rainydays

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6 posted 2000-11-21 01:24 PM


This should be required reading for everyone contemplating ditching their integrity for a moment's pleasure... believing regrets won't ruin everything. *S* Great poem!
Mattster
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7 posted 2000-11-21 01:34 PM


Makes the right sound in my ears, Tony.
OLIAS
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8 posted 2000-11-21 02:18 PM


I love the line "the eviscerate lands will flourish in the spring", very exciting imagery. An excellent piece of work and a pleasure to read.

Regards,
Olias

Tony Abbot
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since 2000-11-18
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North Wales,UK
9 posted 2000-11-22 08:38 AM


Thank you all for replying.Very much appreciated.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

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