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Shadow's Shore (a walk toward life)
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Shadow's Shore (a walk toward life) |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
"Shadow's Shore" Along this terrace of the night I breathe, alive, and linger, sane and think upon each struggle, wild, 'twas fought to offer soul's regain For preservation battles forth along this road to reverie to keep one's mind from grim remorse a castaway 'pon swirling sea As on the edge of wave's release I veer by moonlight's maiden moan the sands, illumined, tempt and tease and bid me feed its frothy foam But I, enswayed toward the blue continue with deliberate stride and curse the moon's magnetic hue, its shadow's shore of coincide For though I falter from the pull I cannot grant submission's sin beyond the waves my heart is full as I prepare to breathe again Rainydays |
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Mattster Junior Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 29 |
Excellent flow, Rainydays. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Rainydays, I'm breathing deeply with you on this one. Lovely. Write on Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Nice to see you catching your breath and ready to move forward. Lovely write from you as usual and wishing you much fresh air as you venture out. |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Mattster, hello and welcome to Passions. I've not been around much for awhile so please forgive my late arrival to say hello. Thank you for reading this piece and letting me know you enjoyed it. Kethry, thank you. The trick is to "keep" breathing, I'm sure. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. Mark, hello. Thank you for reading and for the kind words. Just a poem.  Rainydays |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Excellent writing! loved this! -Tier |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hi Rainy This is a wonderful poem from you. . . we've all taken that walk. . . it's pretty good isn't it? Wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
This is enchanting and hauntingly beautiful.Look forward to reading more of your work. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Rainydays, Nice imagery and well written piece. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You must be reading my mind, my thoughts, so glorious to read another's feelings and feel your own in those. Loved it. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Tiersdin, thank you very much for letting me know you enjoyed. Hi Sven, yes, it's a struggle, but so worth it when you realize you can pull away from the waves. Thanks, friend. Tony, thanks. Have you read my "He" inspired by your "She" yet? Thanks for sharing that beautiful poem here and for the subsequent inspiration. Lonewolf, thanks very much for reading. Glad you liked. Irish Rose, thank you so much for letting me know this piece moved you. Yes, isn't it remarkable to read your own thoughts in a poem that you've not composed? I love when that happens. Thanks again! Rainydays |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
WOW...intense...loved the imagery and the 'walk toward life'. I agree with Sven, everyone takes that walk at one time or another. Elizabeth |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Rainy, I like the flow in the poem and the way the reader travels through the path of beauty in words that you weaved... Great write Coco |
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