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Michael
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0 posted 2000-11-20 12:22 PM


CRY OF THE DAMNED


Hear the voices singing, singing
Eerily in mind, the ringing
Of the dead or of the dying
Calling to me, crying, crying…

From the sorrow of another
Dimension far beyond this;
“I feel your woe, whimsical brother,
But stand long in light of this…

Atrocity – What are the reasons
For such undue outpourings of
Felicity?  In these, your seasons
Of unwarranted, unrequited love.”



“Dance in dance, all dreamers swaying,
Of the smiling dead, portraying
Hope in some immortal fashion
To this helpless, hopeless passion.”

Again the voices call, “Arise!
Heed now this message; Believe
You in trust of misguided eyes,
‘Tis not for life but Death you grieve.”


And so I sit, aimlessly ponder
The riddles of this pagan curse,
Watching the soulless soul I squander
Wither away in dying verse.


Michael Anderson

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But dreams of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned and die.


EAP


[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 11-20-2000).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2000-11-20 12:27 PM


Oh Michael...this is wrenching...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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2 posted 2000-11-20 12:33 PM


Reminiscent of Poe, Michael. Well done.
Irish Rose
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3 posted 2000-11-20 02:17 PM


Yes, it brought to mind Poe, whom I dearly love and others. I would rather read something like this than all the modern poetry written in the last 20 years. Bravo!

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

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4 posted 2000-11-20 02:20 PM


This is a really deep and depressing poem. It is very much like Poe, and I enjoyed it just as much. Thanks for sharing.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-11-20 03:06 PM


Wonderful Michael ... the emotions you capture out of the depths simply amaze me. I think I've walked the path this speaks to me of ... I've lived the life of the walking-dead, and it's a long and oh so lonely path. Incredible writing with such deep melodic tones Michael, so good to read you again!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2000-11-20 03:08 PM


Great job Michael, I really liked this.
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7 posted 2000-11-20 03:15 PM


"Believe You in trust of misguided eyes" ~~ particularly enjoyed this line.

Hello Michael, this piece, though dark, is poetically illuminating. I enjoyed your form and method. Thank you ~

Rainydays

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8 posted 2000-11-20 03:22 PM


Michael,
and they say poetry is dead...
write on
Kethry


Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed?
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Corinne
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9 posted 2000-11-20 03:28 PM


Ah, the dark muse has returned, such deep sadness and longing in this piece.

Corinne

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10 posted 2000-11-20 03:31 PM



“I feel your woe, whimsical brother,
But stand long in light of this…
=================
Felicity?  In these, your seasons
Of unwarranted, unrequited love.”

“Dance in dance, all dreamers swaying,
Of the smiling dead, portraying
Hope in some immortal fashion
To this helpless, hopeless passion.”

Again the voices call, “Arise!
Heed now this message; Believe
You in trust of misguided eyes,
‘Tis not for life but Death you grieve.”

And so I sit, aimlessly ponder
The riddles of this pagan curse,
Watching the soulless soul I squander
Wither away in dying verse.
===============
*shaking my head* ...
no one can touch you when you go walking on the dark side M, ..
this is so well done and your changing off of rhyme schemes in the verses is so cool...
made for a very cool read aloud ...
and those last 2 lines....
poetic perfection ....
but I must protest   ...
as long as you write...nothing of your soul is squandered...
awesome write dark prince...truly.
jm



There are moments ...
when I Love you
beyond the limits of my human heart ...

...you will always be mine.

Collin Raye


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11 posted 2000-11-20 08:31 PM


Poetry at it's finest. You are a giant walking among us, Michael.  
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12 posted 2000-11-20 11:25 PM


michael-

you write "dark" along with the best of
them. this is just amazing though heart
wrenching...still amazing. the depth at
which you write always stuns me. as i've
said before...i stand in total awe of
you. you have an awesome talent.
take care
~amy~

Michael
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13 posted 2000-11-21 01:12 PM


Sunshine... Uh, is that good?...LOL

Mattster, Heck of a complimnet there, TY.

Irish Rose, Ah, Poe bled his flavor into me as a youth though I could never match such a master I know.  Still, I am with you so far as the so called "modern" poetry all the way.  To me, in many ways, it seems as if they've slaughtered an art form and in their own ignorance proclaimed it art.

Love Bug, so glad you enjoyed.

Kit, I believe we all walk this path at one time or another...

PaulF, nice to meet you.  Hope to read some of your own poetry soon - welcome to Passions...

Rainydays, yeah - that line was probably one of my favorites too... glad you enjoyed.

Kethry, to me, poetry is the voice of the soul.  When poetry is dead, so shall we all be.

Corinne, yeah, been looking for that muse for quite awhile now, I knew she couldn't have completely abandoned me...

JM, glad you enjoyed the switching up on form throughout this one - just felt like doing something I hadn't ever tried before I guess...  

PdV, I am just a poet among many, many wonderful poets here and truly I would never aspire to be thought of as more than a friend to any of you, but thank you dearly.

Amy, Indeed, it's the Dark where I am truly at home...


Thank you all for the kind replies,


Michael


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14 posted 2000-11-21 01:22 PM


Micheal,I found this particularly powerful and emotionally resonant.Great work.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

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15 posted 2000-11-21 03:55 PM


Michael,

I would agree with everyone and say this reminded me of Poe but it didn't....it simply reminded me of YOU...and to that there is no comparison my friend. Good to see your work again...( I was beginning to have Michael withdrawals LOL

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