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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-11-20 10:53 AM



when next I am touched…

I will recall you
your smile
that drawn out look
of lingering
in your eyes

that spark
that alighted
briefly

right…there…

in your touch
electric

electric is not
enough to express

quivering

not enough to
elucidate

anticipation

at the exhilaration
which remains

right…here

when I recall
the lingering
of your
eyes

when next I am touched

you will hear
my sigh



Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Tony Abbot
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1 posted 2000-11-20 10:59 AM


Gasp-inducingly beautiful.Full of longing of desire.Reminded me of Wagner's 'Tristan and Isolde'.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

Sunnyone
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2 posted 2000-11-20 11:31 AM


The longing and passion leap out of these beautiful words, through my eyes and into my heart. Now who is magic, my dear friend?


Follow your dream!


Lighthousebob
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3 posted 2000-11-20 12:06 PM


Your warm rays of inspriration have touched my heart once angain.  I liked the part about the lingering eyes... that mental image realy touched me.   Bob <><
Mark Bohannan
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4 posted 2000-11-20 12:24 PM


Lingering eyes and *sighs* thrown in as well...hhhmmmmmm now that has a message of visual images now doesn't it?  Lovely verse my friend.
Michael
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5 posted 2000-11-20 12:34 PM


Well, this got a big sigh out of me...  

Beautiful yearning...


Michael

Sunshine
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6 posted 2000-11-20 01:41 PM


Tony, welcome to Passions!  Thank you for coming in to read, and the audible "gasp" provided me a huge smile...

Sunny1...thank you O shining one!

Bob, having you visit is a treat, indeed...thank you...

Mark, welcome home! Thanks for coming in to read...

Ah Michael, how nice...thank you...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Sven
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7 posted 2000-11-20 08:12 PM


*sigh*

this is wonderful my friend. . .  

-----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Denise
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8 posted 2000-11-20 08:40 PM


Very beautiful, Karilea! Lovely!

Denise

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9 posted 2000-11-20 08:46 PM


I can hear the sigh now...actually I can hear the entire poem and it is beautiful...
DreamSeeker
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10 posted 2000-11-20 08:49 PM


The Pounding
Makes Mad Monkish
Term
Heart Strings

Anvils Hammers
Blind Believing Strokes
Forges All We Crave And Call Unknown

Forever Forged Anthem To...

catalinamoon
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11 posted 2000-11-20 10:33 PM


Whew...it's all been said, but this is a beauty.
Sandra

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12 posted 2000-11-20 11:51 PM


thank you, friend Sven...

denise, four words of thanks...all I ever need...

'Deer, whoever educated you...thank them for me...if you can hear, then you can...believe...

DreamSeeker...I do not know why you pose your poetry so...but it is indeed intriguing...
Welcome again, to Passions...

Cat, I thank you...for I like it, too...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Marsha
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13 posted 2000-12-06 06:19 PM


Kari I somehow missed this the first time round, so like Bo Peep, I've found the lost sheep, and have brought it home. And even if I hadn't missed it the first time round I would have done so. I missed you today kid, I really have, I know you've been busy so I'll soothe my soul with this. You know it's wonderful don't you, well it is as always and I love it too.
Take care
             Majestic Marsha
                    
                       


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning


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Deep in the heart
14 posted 2000-12-06 06:23 PM


To borrow a word ... *sigh*



Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
15 posted 2000-12-06 07:36 PM


Evening Sunshine,

You do express yourself well in this writing of yours. Just lovely, and a pleasure when I read it.

BC

Startime
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16 posted 2000-12-06 07:40 PM


*sigh* yes, if only to be touched that I too may sigh like this. I love your work and the wonderful softness it gives me in the reading. Much love to you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


Martie
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17 posted 2000-12-06 08:51 PM


Karilea--Everyone has sighed so much that I hope you don't mind one more...sigh and a beautiful!
Sunshine
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18 posted 2000-12-07 10:10 AM


Ah my friends, thank you...Marsha has learned that while beautiful lilies float on top [page 1] there are many treasures awaiting us below the water's surface...thank you Marsha for bringing this back up, 'tis one of my favorites...

Interloper, from YOU, a sigh sounds good...

Thank you Bill, for taking the time to read this...

Startime...it's a soft touch...thank you...

Martie...you can sigh, sing, laugh with me...anytime!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




kindasorta
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19 posted 2000-12-07 10:33 AM


...sighing too!
Sunshine
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20 posted 2000-12-07 11:18 AM


KindaSorta...Welcome to Passions!  I am honored that you blessed my poem as your FIRST reply...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




dragonpoe
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21 posted 2000-12-07 11:20 AM


So very well done. A great effect in the brief lines and extra ...'s
Enjoyed this very much.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Lady Lightning
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22 posted 2000-12-07 01:49 PM


Sigh, Sigh, Sigh...Nothing else come close except for maybe... another ~Sigh~...   ~LL~
Lady Lightning
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23 posted 2000-12-07 01:50 PM


Oops...Sorry guys..

[This message has been edited by Lady Lightning (edited 12-07-2000).]

Irish Rose
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24 posted 2000-12-08 10:30 AM


beautiful!!!

What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman



Sunshine
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25 posted 2001-01-07 09:21 PM


dragonpoe, LadyLightening, Irish...thank you all for reading!...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




LilJenn
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26 posted 2001-01-07 09:36 PM



Now this is poetry...
I have no chioce but to sigh
I really enjoyed this

Tara Simms
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Honea Path, SC USA
27 posted 2001-01-07 09:48 PM


This leaves me aching, longing for the moment the love of my life next touches me.  Splendid!
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