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Sunnyone
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0 posted 2000-11-20 12:58 PM





The fog is drifting through the trees like a cold-hearted thief,
in the night…
It's icy, wet fingers leave behind droplets on everything
it touches…
Nothing is left undisturbed…
It violates every life form in it's path…
The air is eerily still, but the fog moves on, of it’s own accord,
picking up and devouring smoke from a hundred woodburners
along it’s path…

The trees drift in and out of human vision in the twilight,
and the fog caresses their naked branches silently,
as if taking on the visual entity of Mother Nature’s love-making…
The moon becomes a silver grey-yellow blob of light,
diffused through the foggy blanket…
And the blanket is never constant,
ripping here and there, to allow a peek through to the black velvet sky,
strewn with distant twinkling objects in the heavens…

Twilight has turned to night-light into dawn’s light,
while the fog gathers it’s forces to assault the morning travelers…
It thrives on human chaos, confusion, and disorientation…
“Where are the lines in the road?”
“Where is the dreaded ditch?”
“Where are the street signs, the familiar markings on which mankind so relies?”
“Where?”
Could it be the fog is Mother Nature’s messenger,
sent to remind us of our insignificant reality?
Does it delight in knowing we are powerless to affect it?

But…on our side, this morning, is our warm ally…the sun,
accompanied by the wind…
As day hours accumulate, the sun enables the pre-Winter breezes
to do her bidding…
And like the ghosts of the night,
the fog disappears,
taking it’s chilled blanket of gloom to other places…
far from here…


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Follow your dream!



[This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 11-20-2000).]

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-11-20 01:02 AM


WOW this is so COOL Sunny...
such mystical imagery...
wonderful descriptive writing
and as always..you have the perfect graphic to add to the enjoyment of your graceful words.
so glad to see you posting...hope all is well
take care
jm

inot2B
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2 posted 2000-11-20 01:05 AM


Beautiful poem you have penned.

The fog in our lives is like the fog outside. It will lift, we just have to
believe our lives will clear up. Sunny days will be back to lead us on.

Sunnyone
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3 posted 2000-11-20 01:06 AM


~~~ Thank you, jm ~~~
It's good to see you tonight. I haven't been able to post for a few days, but it's good to be back....I'm glad you liked this one, as I sure do enjoy putting these together. (I'm hooked on graphics, too!)  Thanks!!  


Follow your dream!


vlraynes
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4 posted 2000-11-20 01:11 AM



Sunny-
   this is wonderful!  
   such excellent imagery in these words.  
   really enjoyed it much!  

   hugs,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Sunnyone
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5 posted 2000-11-20 01:20 AM


~~~ Thank you, inot2B ~~~
Yes, I always like to think that the sun is still up there shining, even through the fog. You're so right....it all boils down to believing and faith!  Thank you!!  

~~~ Thank you, vicky ~~~
Ah....I love images, and I find that it's quite a challenge to paint with words....their color is far more powerful than actual pictures, and they stay in the mind longer!  Thank you!!  


Follow your dream!


nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2000-11-20 04:45 AM


Beautiful! Beautiful! Beautiful!

and that goes for the  graphics too


And like the ghosts of the night,
the fog disappears,
taking it’s chilled blanket of gloom to other places…
far from here…

loved this...

~Wynter



"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Sunshine
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7 posted 2000-11-20 10:05 AM


Have you ever seen the sun through the fog...she tries so desperately with fingerays to break through the shield of the cool misty vapor, bringing welcoming light, and warming presence...

havee you ever seen the sun through the fog?

Sunny1, you are magic...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Sunnyone
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8 posted 2000-11-20 11:26 AM


~~~ Thank you, Wynter ~~~
I am glad that you joined me to study the fog! I always enjoy sharing with a new friend, and it's nice to meet you today!!  

~~~ Thank you, Sunshine ~~~
Ah, yes, I have seen the sun poking fingers of light through the gloom.....many times it has cheered my spirit to feel the warmth of her touch. But Sunshine....all poets are magic....and whatever level we are on depends on our power of observation, I think. There's always a new lesson to learn!!  
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Follow your dream!



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Mark Bohannan
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9 posted 2000-11-20 01:08 PM


HEY SIS!!!!!!!!!  Gawd how I have missed being around especially when it comes to reading pieces of poetry such as this.  Yes, I loved it and the poet's heart too.  Your graphics are amazing too but the poetry shines in it's own light more than I could ever tell you.  Hugs and luv to you my sweet sister and you better be taking care of yourself.
Sunnyone
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10 posted 2000-11-20 03:28 PM


Well hello big brother!!!
Oh, it's so good to see your name again, and read your thoughts as you reply!! I can't tell you how I have missed you.  Yes....I am trying to take care of myself, as I have a lot of reading to do here. You see, my brother, the fog of my day has been washed away by the sunshine of your presence!!  


Follow your dream!


OLIAS
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11 posted 2000-11-20 03:43 PM


Very descriptive with great imagery, a wonderful read. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

Regards,
Olias

Sunnyone
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12 posted 2000-11-20 05:03 PM


~~~ Olias ~~~
Thank you so much, and good to see you here today!!  Sometimes I think, that as a musician, I spend most of my waking hours in a fog!! Ha!!  


Follow your dream!


wayoutwalt
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13 posted 2000-11-20 05:14 PM


i couldn't fully appreciate this poem cuz I just woke up and now i got fog in my eyes. was that lame? This is a fine poem sunny love your stuff
Victoria
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14 posted 2000-11-20 05:38 PM


love it Sunny..and love the pic too...such an eerie setting..my kind of poem..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Sunnyone
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15 posted 2000-11-20 10:28 PM


~~~ Thank you, Walt ~~~
Nah....I've done lamer ones myself, but I liked the part about getting the fog in your eyes!!  Glad you came by and enjoyed!!


~~~ Thank you, Victoria ~~~
The picture reminds me of something straight out of Dark Shadows!! I expect to see Barnabus chasing someone down by the trees any minute now!! Glad you liked this one!!


Follow your dream!


catalinamoon
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16 posted 2000-11-20 10:39 PM


Sunny, dark shadows is right! Wasn't Barnabas the best character?  You have a way with nature imagery.
(tomorrow is the baby day-wish us luck)
Sandra

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17 posted 2000-11-20 10:44 PM


Sunny, this is excellent writing. I know 'cause I've been in the fog most of my life!!!  
Paula Finn
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18 posted 2000-11-21 12:46 PM


I love the fog...the icy fingers...the little cat whispers...beautiful Sunny
Sunnyone
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19 posted 2000-11-21 12:50 PM


~~~ Sandra ~~~
Oh, my.....I almost fogot about Tuesday, and yes, I do wish you luck!!!! Another beautiful child to enter this world....what a special day it will be for you!! All my love to you both.....


~~~ Balladeer ~~~
You and I seem to have a lot of circumstances in common!! I love the fog, and have spent about 90% of my life there!!
I'm surprised I didn't run into you in my hazy travels!! Ha!!  


Follow your dream!


Sunnyone
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20 posted 2000-11-21 02:12 AM


~~~ Paula ~~~
I was raised in the fog on the Oregon coast, and have also loved it for years. I love it's mystical ways, and it's icy fingers. Only real twins could have this much in common!!
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Follow your dream!





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CocoBaci
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21 posted 2000-12-07 10:00 PM



SUNNY1, I know I missed this first time round but here I am and I caught it this time...

Sweetie, your words bring the reader to journey into that mysterious fog...

Ya know I read your poem three times (ahun 3) and after each read I glanced back up to your image, hence bottom line... your poem is like 'MAGIC'...

coco


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Sunnyone
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22 posted 2000-12-07 11:44 PM


~~~ Hi Coco ~~~
Thank you so much!! I was hoping that the magic and suspense of the picture would work together with the thoughts and words. I appreciate your bringing this one back, as it has meaning to me....I grew up on the Oregon coast.....in the fog!!  So...thank you for visiting today!  


Write on!
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Irish Rose
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23 posted 2000-12-08 09:39 AM


The images in this are going to be with me for awhile, it is a very effective writing, thank you Sunny!

What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman



Bill Charles
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24 posted 2000-12-08 12:10 PM


Excellent Sunny, a vivid portrait of the fog you have painted in my mind.

BC

Sunnyone
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25 posted 2000-12-08 01:28 PM


~~~ Irish Rose ~~~
Ah yes......I intended for the images to infiltrate and remain awhile, just like the fog itself does!  Thank you, my friend!!  

~~~ BC ~~~
Yes......thank you.  I do so enjoy painting with words and graphics. I'm glad that you enjoyed this one, as I always do yours.  


Write on!
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Wilfred Yeats
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26 posted 2000-12-08 01:50 PM


I remember in my youth  - driving into a ditch because of fog - my trip between Buffalo and Detroit delayed untill a truck could pull me out - a great picture - a great poem - it took me back
Sunnyone
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27 posted 2000-12-09 08:53 AM


~~~ Wilfred ~~~
I've had a similar experience!  One lesson I learned is to never follow the tailights in front of you, as you'll both end up in the ditch!! Ha!! Thank you for reading!!  


Write on!
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