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his hands... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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here's my hand... --The back of it- FEEL IT. taste your blood of spit. here's my hand... --around your throat- TASTE IT. may you feel the choke. here's my hand... --within? the key- KISS IT. it will set you free. take my hand... --kiss my ring- ETERNAL GIFT of everything. see my hand... --it's beckoning- THE STING of sing of stifling. This hand, he offers willingly a hand that holds the golden key this hand, caresses endlessly hands of thief rob best in me... where are the hands that nurture me? are they hands wave seemlessly goodbye, goodbye, goodbye to me? |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, this was intense.. girl can you write or what...  Take my hand, I lend it to thee... Parker |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I hope this isn't from personal experience, because I've been there, and hands should only nurture, protect and honor, not hurt. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
here's my hand... --within? the key- KISS IT. it will set you free. take my hand... --kiss my ring- ETERNAL GIFT of everything. see my hand... --it's beckoning- THE STING of sing of stifling. ========================== another ~weekend~ of inspriration baby? I know...I know... "only women bleed" ... hold on to that key...its yours... love you me twin... me *********** I wish for hands of healing ... for an empowered, gentle touch. So that I might lay my hands on you, so that I might be your crutch. I wish for understanding eyes ... for vision to see on thru. So that I might then help you to see, so that thru my eyes ... you might finally see you. I wish for a forgiving heart ... for the gift of unconditional love so true. So that I might share this gift so rare, so that love's venial touch would then embrace you. I wish for an enchanted poets pen ... for which to write perfect rhyme and verse. So that I might find the words to say, so that I might write the lines that would free you of this curse. Janet Marie *wrote this a ways back for another special poet... seems to apply again. take care of you for me... |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Intense hurt here. Betrayal, crushed heart, I'm not sure of the story, but it rings true, and is well-written and powerful. The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
too many know the sting. . . well done my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
WWWOOOOWWW! Sure glad I'm not the object of that! Great write! Grrrrr... jwesley |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My God lady! This is incredible! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very powerful, serenity....hopefully fantasy  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
S'en, you know I'm not usually without words to describe what your work makes me feel...but being the rare and beautiful poet that you are...I'm indeed without the words...simply know that I love you my friend and my hands and my heart are always outstretched to you~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--You hold the power of words within your heart...this poem hurts. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I apologize again, for not thanking you all individually. I do love you all, and appreciate the concern you have shown--and I AM FINE... just a bad "flashback"? smile...all is well, but I do want to thank you. And please? If anyone feels they relate to this, feel free to e mail me, as I have some very good info on this subject...MUCH HUGS. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity- wow..this is so powerful! you are amazing! i'm glad to hear that this is a past experience and not something that you are going through now...although i wish you wouldn't have experienced something this painful at all. awesome write! hugs to you, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ This is indeed intense - and it had BETTER be fantasy - cause they've got a 11:05 a.m. flight outta Orlando International and I'm up to kicking butt ! ~*Mom*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mom? somehow, I KNEW you lived in Disneyworld...grin.... I love ya much...and yes, I'm fine. (I'm the one with the mean left hook, remember?) Big hugs to you... vicky? didn't mean to leave you out...thank you much luvie...hugs to heart. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 11-20-2000).] |
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