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Corinne
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0 posted 2000-11-19 01:10 PM



Free to Fall

Barely contained by skin
soon we will be joined,
each part played in faith -
uniquely scripted for us.

Moments we have lived
even so, each one magic
my imagination ad lib
cannot conjure nor portend
but to call upon desire.

Embodiments relished -
the tears as we parted,
peace, your gift of strength,
down upon one knee,
poised for a romeo query.

Obstacles of mortal construct -
merely passing matter and mass,
no match for spirit.


Corinne




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Tiersdin
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1 posted 2000-11-19 01:22 PM


A strong bond of love is most cherished thing to have...

lovely poem...

-Tier

ethome
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2 posted 2000-11-19 01:23 PM


Corinne you're still writing beautiful soft and deep poems as well as ever if not better!!    write on!!   ethome
Butterflies_dont_cry
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3 posted 2000-11-19 01:39 PM


Life can dish out what ever it may...but
when love is strong and true...it only
strengthens during the tough
times...Excellent thoughts Corrine~


You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2000-11-19 01:49 PM


Corinne,
Your poems always sound deep water.
With very little quarter.
Enjoyed the swim.

Corinne
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5 posted 2000-11-19 05:01 PM


Yes, Tiersdin, and thank you.

Ethome, thank you for the lovely words.

Butterfly, thank you!

Seymour, what a wonderful sound - deep water.
Thanks!

Corinne

Romy
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6 posted 2000-11-19 05:04 PM


very beautiful and well written!  I love the title!
kaile
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7 posted 2000-11-19 06:52 PM


Obstacles of mortal construct-
merely passing matter and mass,
no match for spirit

esp enjoyed this stanza...truly well said!!

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2000-11-19 07:30 PM


Barely contained by skin
soon we will be joined,
each part played in faith -
uniquely scripted for us.

Moments we have lived
even so, each one magic
my imagination ad lib
cannot conjure nor portend
but to call upon desire.

=============
C, i just love this poem...
so very well written with your usual depth and clarity ...
and so cool is the title ..
awesome write girlie girl   truly.
jm

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
Lao Tze Tao

~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Tony Abbot
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9 posted 2000-11-19 07:33 PM


This was a lovely lilting piece that flows over the soul beautifully.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

Balladeer
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10 posted 2000-11-19 07:34 PM


No, no match for spirit at all...and the spirit is willing  
Passions Voice
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11 posted 2000-11-20 12:47 PM


I can feel the electricity.

The spirit is indeed willing.  But what of the flesh?  

passion is life. . . ~Diana

Corinne
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12 posted 2000-11-21 11:41 PM


Thank you all for your inspirational comments!

Corinne

Parker
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13 posted 2000-11-22 11:27 AM


Corinne, this was a wonderful piece. Enjoyed the read muchly...  

Park

Denise
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14 posted 2000-11-24 11:04 AM


Very nice, Corinne!!

Denise

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15 posted 2000-12-15 06:00 AM


Another excellent one, Cor! I might have to do me a search on you!
Irish Rose
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16 posted 2000-12-15 06:37 AM


fine verse, Corinne.

"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day,
so I never have to live without you."

Winnie the Pooh



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