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artsygrl
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 55
Florida

0 posted 2000-11-19 12:00 PM



You say to meditate my mind,
When it has always been this free
And I a sacred of what I have not yet seen.
Oh I am trying
It tears upon my soul

O what foolish wanderings are my thoughts?
They are filled with clutter
I am overwrought over petty ideals

If only I could be free to trace my fingers upon someone who is showing himself real

Hear my ramblings my pain
And I did not mean to gain a vanity's bargaining
I did not mean to emphasize pride

My defensiveness to not hear the constructive criticism,
To place its tool to polish me
From all this unneeded roughness and rustic sheltering

So shelter'd do I feel
Please heal me
Restore to me my innocence of love

So sweet the childhood fantasy of believing
And I still believe
Could you be easier with me to just enjoy my company?
Could you just for a moment hold me?
Could you for a moment not try to mold me for my own
Benefit?

Could you see the beauty that already exists?
For I once ran wildly, happily, naively, free
Unsure of who I could be
And in this moment I am idling unsure of whom I am
Could you for once not be the teacher but the friend?
-Barbara M. Brewer-

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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-11-19 12:16 PM


Hey Barbra welcome to passions... this is a great write I love the poetic way you ask such pointed questions....love the end and your appeal for something stable ...good work!! ethome
Celeste
Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597

2 posted 2000-11-19 12:29 PM


Welcome.......a nicely flowing questioning.



To capture and live a moment is truly living

artsygrl
Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55
Florida
3 posted 2000-11-19 02:23 PM


thank you dream keeper and ethome for your welcome and kind words....
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