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Slipping in...........................
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Slipping in........................... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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May I slip in? just to read? may I sigh quietly at this compassion you call poetry? may I slip in? just to feel? hear the heartstring song so real… may I slip out? so silently and take my tears away you see for you have touched the heart of me when I silently slipped in to read you. a day can come so quietly a dream and your words may come so serene bringing music to wind my soul was that your goal? you did it, just so. may I slip back in into your embrace? and softly now and with grace may I lay finger to your face to trace a lip, a brow for you have touched me vast somehow and then I shall slip away and take with me all you say and keep it here… privately… just your words embracing me. and when next I slip in to read know please sir that I am smiling most pleasantly when I rest my eyes on you. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Good morning Sunshine!  The flow of this is outstanding.....a gentle swirling and dancing of quiet thoughts flying free. I salute you with my coffee cup! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, now this is perfect poetry. A beautifully flowing glowing wonderful piece. Ideal work. Take care Majestic Marsha Oh and I love it< !signature--> Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning [This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 11-19-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
dreamkeeper, I have to laugh, because I just returned with my hot coffee laced heavy with cream...thank you "clink"... Marsha, this one just "slipped out"...{~,^}...thank you dear heart, for taking the time to read... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You slip in to read anytime you want to sweetheart!! I love how you carried the theme all the way through this one with such expressions of respect for the gifts that we all share......ethome. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Very thought proving piece. Raised a lot of questions, I hope you get a answer. As far as I am concerned.....you can slip in anytime. Truely enjoyed the read. |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Your words just never cease to amaze me Karilea ~ This is sooooooo beautiful.... please let me join in the toast, and clink of the coffee cup to you.... Bonnie |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
me thinks you dont even have to ask  excellent Sun...perfect presentation to accent this ones thoughts and expressions ... tis indeed a lovely morning read ... tis why you are Sunshine ... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Words as soft as a whisper or caress... *sigh* -Tier |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Karilea- I 'felt' this - as truly as if you really had slipped in and touched my cheek - may I say it touched me deeply - and I pray you do it - again and again |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sunshine, I'm sure if I look up "class" in the dictionary your picture will be there. What style you put into this piece! You create very pleasant smiles yourself... May you slip in....? Oh, yes, please...any time. Poems love the touch of your eyes.... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Karilea. . . you have again showed why you are indeed Sunshine. . . Beautiful my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely, Karilea! Denise |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethome, how special your words are...I think you caught the moment, thank you... Alan, I do like to provoke...good naturedly...thank you... Bonnie, glad to know we were sharing a cuppa.... JM, you sweet thing...thank you... Tier...thank you... Mr. Yeats, that indeed was the underlying intention of the piece, so I am glad you were able to read into it and enjoy it...thank you... 'Deer...oh my...thank you...but if you had a picture of me, you would likely slip into a dictionary under the word "wierd..." LOL...seriously, thank you... thank you Sven... thank you denise... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I think the question would be one of a mute point. You have penned perfection in this one my friend and the whole tone takes my mind a wandering to beauty and love that one can only dream of.....but dreams can become real with enough heart poured into it. Going in my library for sure. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The library is closed...due to reconstruction of the heart...so glad this took you on a pleasant wander...it still likes me, too...thank you Mark... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you James...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I think this says what I was trying to tell you earlier...your words weave it much better than I ever could...there are just not enough thank-you's to tell you what it means~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
BDC, don't ever worry about thank you's...just explore your heart and know peace...then, be content...and be well... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
THIS IS GORGEOUS!!!!! *sigh* - SEA |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
so is your sigh SEA!...thank you! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is still one of my favourites of yours, okay it's true that all yours are my favourites, but this really is utterly divine. I think it's because I have this vision of you sitting with me in the gazebo, drinking tea and watching the sunset over the orchards. (Admittedly there are only three rose bushes left in the garden, the other nine having given up the ghost and pegged out. I think I over prunned them or something) But the view out there is nice anyway. I really love this one Take care kid Majestic Marsha (The rose bush killer )Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, I'll join you in the gazebo, I like Peppermint tea...and I will join you in the replanting of some lovely Peace roses... thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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