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Oh....woe is me......
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Oh....woe is me...... |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Here I sit High in this old scraggly tree I watch the chipmunk below me Scampering to and fro With no particular place to go Stopping once in awhile to chatter Then going thru the leaves with such a clatter Then he is gone, no where to be found Then I see the shadow over me Oh…. woe is me For I am flying thru the air With the greatest of ease For a falcon has gotten me |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Alan: I've been reading your generous comments on other poets all day - how nice to read one of yours now - I did enjoy it and hope to read some more soon!  Roniece |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Roniece....thank you...I have been spending a lot of time in the adult side....but had to excape...to the lighter side....glad you liked it. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The ending certainly caught me by suprise...one of the great things about poetry...expect the unexpected Great writing Alan!! |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Thank you Butterfly....I try to twist mine most of the time......thank you for taking the time and reading. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i love plot twists! The twists and turns haha no just flying calmly through the air... Greay write yuh! |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Thank you wayoutwalt..... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Loved this in Judy's place, love it here, too, Alan! Corinne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very good, Alan! I enjoyed this! Denise |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
LOL oh boy Alan...I can just see this...you watching...and being watched...then snatched...clever |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
always love your lighter side..I needed it tonight~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I'm going to date myself but I just can't help it! "With no particular place to go" I loved this line, reminded me of Chuck Berry! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Mattster Junior Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 29 |
A very interesting, different, original and clever ending, Alan. |
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