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vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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Somewhere... out there...

0 posted 2000-11-18 11:20 PM




write me to sleep
compose me a dream
sing me a sonnet
of true love supreme

lull me with prose
till sleep overtakes me
hold me till morning
with sweet senryu wake me

shower me gently
with wet haiku kisses
let passion embrace me
fulfilling my wishes

we'll pen a duet
with the ink of our hearts
and free-verse our way
through the difficult parts

when nightfall returns
with its soft moonlight gleam
just sing me a sonnet
compose me a dream


~vlraynes




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



© Copyright 2000 Vicky L. Raynes - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
1 posted 2000-11-18 11:30 PM


Oh I love this piece - it has a wonderful flow to it - well written   Roniece  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
2 posted 2000-11-18 11:46 PM


Vicky*
This is absolutely beautiful...the flow was
perfect and the message sang a song so
beautiful that even angels couldn't do it
justice...Truly this is my favorite of
yours...and as your work continues to grow I
reserve the right to update my choice as
needed   Exquisite writing~


You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~

Alan
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499
right next door
3 posted 2000-11-18 11:50 PM


Simply beautiful. Great work
Blackdrake
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since 1999-07-23
Posts 83
Depends on the day :)
4 posted 2000-11-18 11:54 PM


This is truly a Wonderful work .  

Mysterious is the shadow walking down the path of light. ~~ ¥ ~~


kcsgrandma
Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
5 posted 2000-11-19 12:14 PM


Looks like someone's going to be busy, Vicky.     Very pretty, though.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
6 posted 2000-11-19 01:10 AM


vlraynes,
Beautifully written. Every word put together to form a wonderful message.

"when nightfall returns
with its soft moonlight gleam
just sing me a sonnet
compose me a dream"

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-11-19 01:21 AM


Vicky~
Just a delight !
An absolute delight.
Yeppers !  You're growing alright !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
8 posted 2000-11-19 01:33 AM


hey!  this is awesome tricks!!  i love this one..this is my new favorite of yours!    and you know, those lines about free-verse, thats my favorite few lines  

very cool..very full of ...of..the stuff poetry should be made of... (well..you know, after that fire poem i read, i'm a little lost for words tonite...lol!!)  but really..i like this one ..a lot!  

wonderful write tricks!!  

hugs, g


"so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

9 posted 2000-11-19 11:09 AM


vicky this is very creative and lovely...
a clever idea to incorporate all the elements of poetry.
a wonderful way to express the emotions and longing of the dream
well done girlie girl  
jm

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
Lao Tze Tao

~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
10 posted 2000-11-19 11:14 AM


wow! really loved this! a perfectly rythmic read from start to finish...

-Tier

Victoria
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11 posted 2000-11-19 11:16 AM


i love this..very creative vicky..

                ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
12 posted 2000-11-19 11:44 PM



Roniece-
   thanks so much.  
   glad you enjoyed this.  

Holly-
   wow...thanks so much, my sweet friend.  
   my smile is too big for my face right now..lol.
   your kind comments are greatly appreciated
   and that you are calling this one your
   favorite of mine really means alot to me.  
   big hugs to you, my friend.  

Alan-
   thank you...glad you like.  

BlackDrake-
   glad you enjoyed this.  
   thanks so much for reading.  

Marilyn-
   LOL @ you....yeppers...it does look
   that way doesn't it...  
   so glad you enjoyed.  
   hugs to you, friend.  

Daniel-
   i always appreciate your kind words.  
   thank you so much, my friend.  

Marge-
   I LOVE your enthusiastic reply!  
   thank you for 'you're growing...'  
   you've put a big smile on this face.  
   love and hugs to you.  

dg-
   lol @ you and that fire poem..
   really glad you like this one so much...
   and i like the 'free-verse' part as well.  
   i appreciate your enthusiasm.  
   love and hugs to you...you feel a bit
   chilled there...why don't you go read
   that fire sonnet again...lol.  
   love ya bunches..

Janet Marie-
   i always love hearing from you...
   thanks so much for the kind words.  
   really glad you enjoyed.  
   hugs to you, my friend.  

Tier-
   thanks so much for the enthusiastic reply.  
   really happy you enjoyed it.  

Victoria-
   thanks much!  
   i really appreciate your replies.  
   glad you enjoyed.  

thanks again all,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
13 posted 2000-11-20 04:36 AM


hey.. my turn..

WOW!
just how much do i love this?
so much I'm going to read it again..

I love that.. "wet haiku kisses"
ohhh this is good!

love it.. ;-)

Snow

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
14 posted 2000-11-20 01:31 PM


Wake in the slumber of poetic grace
With a thousand kisses upon your face
Dream of dances written and played for you
As the night lends to sigh to morning's dew

Rest not til the sun embraces midnight's moon
Come tomorrow you will wake to a tender tune
Gently cuddle to the music this one will send
As the music will dance to a forever friend

spiked
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
15 posted 2000-11-20 01:39 PM


vlraynes
You seem to have composed a dream so well yourself.
Great job
Rich

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
16 posted 2000-11-22 12:43 PM



snow-
   thanks for the enthusiasm, my friend..
   yep...those wet haiku kisses can be fun..lol.
   really glad you enjoyed this.

Mark-
   huge smiles you have put on this face..
   i always LOVE your poetic responses, and
   this one is simply beautiful..
   thank you, my friend..
   love and hugs to you..

Rich-
   thanks so much...glad you enjoyed..

thanks again all,
   -vicky





"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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